| Comment By: VizualEnsemble on April 17, 2007 10:09:33 AM
Great write young man. This is amazing.
| Comment By: Jeff on April 17, 2004 11:32:48 AM
|First of all Caly, happy birthday.|
Secondly you are a very good writer.
Your poems have a real honesty about them.
| Comment By: Stephen Owen AKA Passion Hawk on March 27, 2004 08:02:43 AM
|good write Clay,you have a long future ahead..Steve|
| Comment By: Gina on March 19, 2004 04:50:05 PM
|Awesome write Clay. enjoyable read, unlike my work, but o well. Keep it up.|
| Comment By: Leonard Wilson on January 7, 2004 11:28:19 AM
|Good form...Good structure...Good grief! You got it bad and that ain't good.I've been there,Clay.It's a torturous sort of pleasure.This is fine writing.When I was 13,I was lucky to write a complete sentence...len|
| Comment By: James Lagoski on January 6, 2004 03:05:14 AM
This is pretty intense for 13!
You certainly have a great admiration for
this face in the crowd-
Sometimes those we long for the most are the farthest ones away-
Don't allow yourself to be blinded by someone
who could be admiring you the same way-
Make sure you check for the other faces
in the crowd that may be looking at you
the same way you are looking at someone else-
Your still young and life moves fast-
May she look back at you and see these feelings you displayed so well here-
Looking forward to seeing more of your
paintings of thought-
| Comment By: The Bag Lady on January 5, 2004 12:34:01 PM
Your verse structure is great, and
I am glad that you have separated the
verses~ Makes for a VERY nice read
about your dedication of this person
that you are mesmerized with~...
Good read....Keep writing~
Margaret...the Bag Lady....readin'
| Comment By: Lady Dragonwyck on January 5, 2004 11:55:18 AM
|Clay, this is very well written. A good post!!|