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Author Name: Freependeriki 2 Comments
Date Added: February 18, 2014 05:02:12 Average Score: (Needs 2)
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Type: Free Verse
Category: Grieving & Loss Add To Favorites | Text Only
 
Loss
A bitter light shines
mourners gather
doom's scythe fallen
as another soul flies

Darkly the sacrificial blood
seeps on naked lips
the bread of life given 
celebrates death
 
I beg forgiveness
and kneel to pray
amid forgotten tombstones 
feeling cold eyes stare
uncaring
 
And my prayer for mercy
falls on ears
that no longer listen
and if there be a God
he has turned his face away
this day
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Comment By: FreeBarbara Demasson on February 27, 2014 11:32:13 AM Report

What jumped out at me was the "sacrificial blood...bread of life" reference. I felt a twinge of opposition to "celebrates death" for I always thought of the bread as symbolic of Christ's body, giving back and celebrating life, gained by His sacrifice. However, I thought about it from a different viewpoint and wondered if perhaps it was written this way because of it being given at a funeral, thus a celebration of the deceased's life after death. Certain despair permeates this poem. My heart is heavy from the hopelessness you convey. Great expression Thomas, whatever grief and despair you wished to bring to the poem is definitely there and I hope it lessens your suffering to leave it on the page. I don't know you or anything about your loss but I have visited the hopeless place where this poem came from and can relate fully. Well done, thank you for sharing.


~Barbara D.~   


Comment By: FreeShe Whispers on February 20, 2014 09:13:27 AM Report
When death comes sometimes as mortals we just don't understand  why?

Your right does God turn his face away at times? Sorry for your loss ~ Hugs ~ Scarlett




 


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