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Author Name: FreeFirestoneFeinberg 7 Comments
Date Added: September 05, 2012 11:09:23 Average Score: (Needs 2)
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LJ's word-bank: A DEEPER MESSAGE

A DEEPER MESSAGE


At 6:15 in the morning
I was awakened by the timeless
telephone.

I had been up all night
listening to country hits
and trying trying trying
to write a song that
would sell a million copies.

I wavered about the lyrics.
I decided to make the song about a
country girl who had landed at the bottom
of a southern garbage dump.

The refrain started with the words:
"I will always try to maintain 
a positive attitude."

The song is good — without major flaws.
There is a recurrent ecological theme that
keeps repeating. The message is that
even the nights are better
than involvement with
a solid straight line.

At the end the girl makes
a flourishing garden by
recycling all the garbage
in the dump.

I sang it for my friend who had
telephoned and interrupted my well-deserved
sleep. She just laughed.

I think I’ll
write another ‘hit song’
tonight... maybe something with a
deeper message.









Author's Notes:
This offering -- without apology -- inan attempt tp fulfill Linda Jo's new Word-Bank Challenge.  Hope you get a laugh...  --D.
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Comments:
Comment By: Freee. Gene Myers on September 6, 2012 05:13:41 PM Report
How can you get deeper than the bottom?  Loved it.  I just wish when people write word banks they'd show which words were the challenge ones.  This is beautifully written with a wonderful story.  Personally, I'd like to see the song.
Gene

Comment By: FreeShe Whispers on September 5, 2012 06:51:26 PM Report
This is so cute I think you did one hell of a job!! ((Smilesssss
Comment By: FreeAdri on September 5, 2012 05:34:31 PM Report
This is very cute!  I really do admire you guys writing word bank poems. I can not do that. 
Very nice

Adri 

Comment By: FreeLinda Jo on September 5, 2012 04:18:13 PM Report
...ok now you're a recording star!!  funny piece of writing here.  Its a good thing your lady in song was determined to maintain a positive attitude...no apology necessary.  good job!
Comment By: PremiumHarry William Harborne on September 5, 2012 03:03:39 PM Report
Oh yes I loved this, you had me laughing, certainly the message could not get much deeper than the bottom of a dump.  I have made the big mistake of reading several entries to this challenge, Now original ideas will fail me for sure.  Bill H.
Comment By: FreeAlistair Muir on September 5, 2012 12:26:08 PM Report
LOL -- This is a rich new look to your poetry David!  Well done sir -- an interesting story and most entertaining...



Alistair

Comment By: FreeTomahawk on September 5, 2012 11:29:03 AM Report


Very humourous, you succeeded in making me laugh, as per you're own unique style.


 


Len





 


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