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Author Name: FreeRaspberry Ice Nymph 5 Comments
Date Added: July 28, 2010 20:07:34 Average Score: (Needs 2)
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Impenetrable Castle
Impenetrable Castle


Push me into a situation where control does not factor and I am out of my element. Tell me that all is lost so that everything I feel from this point is gain. Lead me past what is known so that I can see that there is more than what the light and dark has shown me. Save me from my dreams because reality is much better than the lies my mind tells me while I sleep.

Beyond the mental dread ,blinded to what the eyes see, lives light, brilliant ardent flares that warm and touch the inner most thoughts of happiness, pushing aside the darkness of evil, blocking the harsh concrete of traveled highways, soothing wounded souls, warming cold and distant hearts. Take my hand , fly with me to the land of contentment, where vivid colors dance in the stars and avidity a shield of constant love

My mind has mapped out my course in hopes that I will follow the path of possible but everything in this world is impossible. Guided by the unknown, I take the leap of faith we call love and invite it to consume me. Am I chasing the dream again or have my eyes finally been awakened by something more then life itself.


Hold tight this faith, feel the strength in it's softness, absorb it into your skin , into your lungs, desires that activate imagination to reality, wild sensual visions that only two share. The oneness of the relationship where wants and needs are flowers growing under your feet, breezes that brush gently against your skin, an impenetrable castle containing walls built in truth, respect. And admiration of two hearts strong in their conviction of forever. This I offer you, written in my blood contaminated with incurable devotion.

co-written by Raspberry Ice Nymph / TJ Hooker
2010
Author's Notes:
Just something a friend  wanted to do something different and break me out of my comfort zone ...this is way out of my comfort zone I was challenged by his first stanza and what a challenge it was..haha
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Comment By: FreeJames Lagoski on August 3, 2010 07:40:11 PM Report
Dear Melody-
First I noted how many had read this and yet left no thoughts.
When I see something written with great detail it is hard to know how to comment.
The first paragraph was the one I really liked although these words were great in their entirety.
I actually was concidering the concept behind the second sentance in this while jotting down a
few thoughts this morning. Challenges in order to find strength within yourself in the end.

The song you listened to today was recorded by my son in 2006. Those words say much to me
as to why I became a writer along with the visions that can come with this gift. The beginning 8-10 lines of
This One brought back a lot of those things and made me pay attention right away.
May the Light of Shangri~La forever Shine Upon Your Path

BEst Wishes to You and Yours My Friend~
Peace~
James 

Comment By: FreeAlfred Berggren on July 30, 2010 05:59:58 PM Report

You willingness to share your love will breach the walls of the impenetrable castle because of your incurable devotion to that person. 


Comment By: FreeBarbara Demasson on July 30, 2010 02:02:31 AM Report
Wow...this poem is full of energy and wisdom...just beautiful! Enjoyed this very much! =))

~Barbara D.~

Comment By: FreeAndrew on July 29, 2010 01:36:49 PM Report
Great tandem effort, Ms Chilly Berry. If you were out of any comfort zone, it's transparent to me. This is yet another example of you stretching your artistic wings and soaring even higher. You've always excelled in your use of colors and you continue to do so. Bravo to you both.

Comment By: FreeTanya Harrison on July 29, 2010 02:43:53 AM Report
I'm impressed that you are thinking this way at your age.  We always want to dream but what we want isn't always what is best for us.  Sometimes broken dreams can lead to dreams that are better for us.  I'm much older than you and I'm just learning this.  Very impressive Melody.  I don't know TJ Hooker and their age.  Gret write.




 


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