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Author Name: FreeRaspberry Ice Nymph 9 Comments
Date Added: April 28, 2010 01:04:48 Average Score: (Needs 2)
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Intrusive Entity
Sharp intrusive weapon,
leaving no visible scars
yet penetrate through
bone and body mass.

Forever affecting ones
ability to think clearly
with positive reinforcement
of attitude.

Prolonged contact disintegrates
the inner being, leaving
a thin shell of confidence
that is easily chipped away

Words forever abide in
memory, nestled deep in
the subconscious, a cancerous
entity devouring stability

Author's Notes:
Verbal abuse can leave invisible scars that forever affect the physical.
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Comment By: PremiumDan J. Mazurek on May 7, 2010 05:58:26 AM Report
after reading this poem this song pop into my head sorry  but your name is Melody.
You've got to accentuate the positive
Eliminate the negative
Latch on to the affirmative
Don't mess with Mister In-Between
You've got to spread joy up to the maximum
Bring gloom down to the minimum
Have faith or pandemonium
Liable to walk upon the scene

Johnny Mercer / Harold Arlen our the writers

Comment By: ModeratorJillian K. Alexis on April 29, 2010 09:23:13 PM Report
This is really good Melody.  And you are right, verbal abuse does leave scars that many times, do not heal.  I'm sorry if this was a personal write about yourself.  If so, I too know your pain.  Beautifully penned, dear one...Hugz...Jillian
Comment By: FreeSteve on April 29, 2010 12:44:03 AM Report
That which once wounded can become that which heals your heart and soul.  Words that stung will pass with the winds and soft whispers of love will shower you like a summer rain.     
Comment By: FreeTanya Harrison on April 28, 2010 09:35:57 AM Report
Melody I really appreciate this poem.  I'm still dealing with the verbal abuse of my ex. It is a cancerous entity. I try to be more mindful about what I say when I am angry at someone.  I hope I never verbally abuse another.  Great job on your poem. I really enjoyed reading it.
Comment By: FreeJames Lagoski on April 28, 2010 09:16:42 AM Report
Dear Melody--
We can see the scars that our bodies will display, but the mind can bear scars that only we as
individuals know are there. So no one has a clue of what you have been through or view within.
Words can echo mentally for an entire lifetime. And they tend to repeat each time we are reminded
of them by another comment or event. A teacher or parent says YOU are a loser-

And everytime you attempt something and fail the first try--Those words can be haunting---

An intelligent subject matter to desipher with poetic description.-

And even the title says this clearly-
A sign of talent--
Best Wishes to You and Yours My friend~

Comment By: Freejohn carter on April 28, 2010 09:07:38 AM Report
This is so good Melody. I am reminded of a period in my life. A long forgotten thief that stripped me of my song. There are many forms of abuse. You highlight this one very well.
Comment By: FreeAndrew on April 28, 2010 06:54:59 AM Report
Prolonged contact disintegrates the inner being, leaving a thin shell of confidence that is easily chipped away...absolutely wonderful.  this is always a touchy subject, but you have done a masterful job bringing light to this insidious villain.  tremendous job. ms. chilly berry

Comment By: FreeAlison Storm Wolf on April 28, 2010 04:03:36 AM Report
Very finely expressed Melody. Many people who come to see me in my capacity as Healer have deep scars that do affect the proper functioning or cripple the person in some way. Sometimes these things are released as the layers are peeled back.
Last two verses should have full stops but the poem is concise and every line something meaningful to say. No exaggeration or sentimentality.
Just nicely written.
Alison x 
Comment By: FreeShe Whispers on April 28, 2010 01:35:15 AM Report
SO....Well you have cfrfted a great poem...such is Life!!


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