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Author Name: FreeRaspberry Ice Nymph 15 Comments
Date Added: April 25, 2010 22:04:12 Average Score: (Needs 2)
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Final Goodbye
I watched her walk through
dew pearled roses, wind softly
ruffling her dress, purple shadows
dance among the sycamore trees as
hunger like a starving wolf grips
my loins, to hold her just once more,
God help me

His warm breath on my neck,
sweet scent of need , my flesh would
awake at the touch of his hand.
How I miss his electric kisses that
sparked longing, closing my eyes
reliving the moment of ecstasy
God help me

Her laugh rings like chimes in my ears,
the look of love as she cocked her head
to the side, playful smile teased her lips,
a knowing wink sparkled blue eyes,
never again will I immerse myself
in her embrace, for this is the
final good bye

With tears un-cried I reach my destination,
falling to my knees a scream pleads for
release, instead a whimper escapes my lips.
Laying a single white rose tied with a
bow of red ribbon I place it on his grave
Kissing the head stone whispering a
final Good bye
 
 
Author's Notes:
Written with a dear friend "Quiet Insanity". Posted with his permission
 
It's the thoughts and words of forever lovers...1st and 3rd stanzas are the tears of the boy
2nd and 4th her final good bye
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Comments:
Comment By: FreeAntony Frank on August 11, 2010 10:03:58 PM Report
Excellent work...

 

Antony.

Comment By: FreeMoonStar on May 4, 2010 07:40:45 PM Report
You, my sweet, are a wonder. Your talent is of such that it makes me gasp in utter awe. You have such a great gift in making one feel your words and taking them along the ride within them. That to me is a gift only few possess. Wonderful flowing piece with such a sorrowful storyline..

 

Hugs,

Moonie xx

Comment By: FreeAngelface on May 4, 2010 12:26:24 PM Report
You have away with words melody that captivates the readers mind! Wish i could write more like you.. I really enjoyed, it drawed me into the scene very much so.. Keep up the wonderful gift you have!

 

Angelface

Comment By: FreeAlison Storm Wolf on April 27, 2010 04:11:12 AM Report
Just amazing writing! I would say you are onto another winner here. I have never read a combined writing exercise where the seemless interaction of the writers is so incredible. The poem is full of emotion that I tuned into straight away and the sense of loss was VERY profound.

The imagery was beautiful indeed and very heart wrenching but it never ever fell into the trap of being cheesy if you know what I mean. It was not over sentimental but it was passionate in the truest sense of the word. Just exquisite writng that moved me deeply and into favs for me!
Ali x
Comment By: ModeratorJillian K. Alexis on April 26, 2010 07:25:33 PM Report
This is beautiful Melody!  I am so sorry for your loss, but remember, they are not only in your past.  They are also in your future, when you see them again in Heaven.  Very lovely dedication...Hugz...Jillian
Comment By: FreeSamantha on April 26, 2010 02:19:50 PM Report
Good poem!! Keep writing, you have a Talent! :)
Comment By: FreeLarry on April 26, 2010 10:54:16 AM Report
Great Write Melody.........Larry
Comment By: FreeLarry on April 26, 2010 10:53:37 AM Report


Comment By: FreeLinda Jo on April 26, 2010 08:08:02 AM Report
such a deeply moving story....one that brings up questions concerning true love...for  a love this pure is this the greatest test?  how deep and how satisfying would their love have become if only they could have lived out their lives together? 

 

the two of you write so well together...seemlessly...flawlessly...beautifully!

Comment By: PremiumHOPE on April 25, 2010 11:26:19 PM Report
A beautifully moving poem.
Tina

Comment By: FreeTanya Harrison on April 25, 2010 11:19:36 PM Report
This is incredible!  Great job.
Comment By: FreeAndrew on April 25, 2010 11:03:34 PM Report
beautiful work by the both of you
Comment By: PremiumDan J. Mazurek on April 25, 2010 10:19:37 PM Report
you continue to stop my pen

when i visit here once again

God has gifted you

what's a poet to do?

Comment By: FreePhillip A. Clapham on April 25, 2010 10:14:10 PM Report
One of your best yet...your word play and flow is evolving nicely...
Comment By: FreeBrianna Burton on April 25, 2010 10:05:18 PM Report
This is so sad and beautiful! You are such a tremendous writer! I love it! :)




 


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