| Comment By: ken on October 15, 2012 01:17:54 PM
|Lighthearted and serious with the same pen strokes|
I love the connection to the divers vision and the bowl;
"Unaware it takes more than
A sprinkling of food
To sustain me"
how often do those around us and the world glorify someone
without ever really seeing them?
you have a knack for metaphor that I admire.
(and a lack of punctuation that irks me;
but I must admit you carry it off with adeptness.)
| Comment By: Steve on March 8, 2010 02:55:20 PM
|It all sounds rather 'fishy' to me. |
| Comment By: MoonStar on March 8, 2010 04:38:11 AM
Now leave it to you to take something so out of the ordinary and make it look so effortless and not only that, but such a fantastic write! All I have to say is this was a great read..
Whoo Hoo. blurb.. blurb..
| Comment By: e. Gene Myers on March 7, 2010 08:18:55 PM
|Sounds like the life of my wife's Bata fish. We even commented about it the other day. What a boring life.|
Better than being flushed down a toilet though I suspect, but not much.
Good thing it doesn't have a gun.
Good poem with life like qualities.
| Comment By: sHeRi on March 7, 2010 06:50:47 PM
Wow...to place yourself in the habitat of a fish and capture their environment as you did is great..I can hear the filter softly vibrate from here. A different plot for sure-well done
| Comment By: Lady Dragonwyck on March 7, 2010 06:20:43 PM
What an interesting write. So, I'll send a dragon and pegasus and just bring that little fishy over to my place ---
| Comment By: Andrew on March 7, 2010 06:20:10 PM
as i read this, i'm seated next to my aquarium, watching my fish make their laps - i dunno - they seem pretty happy to me.
but i guess if i were in that tank, i'm be a little less content - nice change of perspective here!