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Author Name: Freeborderline_mary 2 Comments
Date Added: December 20, 2008 22:12:01 Average Score: (Needs 2)
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Type: Rhyming
Category: Depression Add To Favorites | Text Only
 
Promises

Then he will say, "I don't want you to go,
but why can't you remember what we were?"
And she will answer, "This one loves you so."

She'll pass her days in emptiness and slow,
her green-blue walls a solitary lure;
then he will say, "I don't want you to go."―

and why he still believes, he doesn't know.
The question in his eyes belies their blur,
and she will answer, "This one loves you so;

I'm working on my poetry now, though.";
but why she says it, she is never sure.
Then he will say, "I don't want you to go."―

and she'll recall what both of them still owe,
in kind for kind―a promise for a cure―
and she will answer, "This one loves you so,

because you never ask this heart to grow."
She'll fade, he'll follow; neither will endure.
Then he will Say, "I don't want you to go . . ."―
and she will Answer, "This one loves you so."

Author's Notes:
A villanelle; an expression of fear of stagnation.
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Comments:
Comment By: Freesaeed davoudi on October 23, 2011 12:06:19 AM Report


very beautiful ......



the rhyms are so great



good luck my friend


Comment By: PremiumDavid Turner on December 21, 2008 07:23:22 AM Report
Very well crafted Jessica - Villanelles are difficult - the French invented them that's why. It's easy for them with all those vowell endings in French words to make rhyming easy. Much harder in English.

 

As for putting your husband off to go and write poems - well what can say? I know what I would say if I was twenty odd again and my new wife preferred words to me:-)

 

Poetry can wait till afterwards!

 

David





 


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