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Author Name: FreeRoger Bacon 27 Comments
Date Added: December 11, 2008 15:12:23 Average Score: (Needs 2)
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Cardinal
Excuse me for my indiscretion-
Over coffee, I hear a cardinal
in the thicket whistle:
 
   Purdy, Purdy, Purdy.
 
I think how white clover heads
have taken over the lawn.
How I should pull them
and tie their ends together
around my wrist.
But how would this look,
being more a father than a son now?
 
By noon, the soft light of morning
gives way to a high sun
and long shadows of morning
walk back into the thicket.
In the kitchen now,
I hear the cardinal outside sing:
 
   What-Cheer, What-Cheer, What-Cheer.
 
The white clover heads
are reaching for this high sun,
and I think of the clover chain.
But how would this look,
being closer to my end
than beginning now?
 
By late afternoon, the sun
moves behind the thicket,
and as I move about
each room yearns light
but slowly accepts a gray
that brings heavy silence.
Outside, I hear the cardinal sing:
 
   Swheet, Swheet, Swheet.
 
And again, I think of the clover.
How each white head
holds a face calling me.
But how would this look,
with so much to do
in so little time?
 
Tonight, off in the distance,
a full moon is the empty,
white light trailing at the
end of a slide show.
The cardinal is gone now,
and the white clover heads
wilt in the dew of my life.
 
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Comments:
Comment By: FreeAndrew on December 1, 2009 09:27:07 PM Report
Roger, this is truly worthy of this award - can't say i'm much of a fan of the white clover heads, but i do love the cardinals visiting my feeders and hiding out in my bushes.  great work.
Comment By: Freenoah count on October 19, 2009 07:26:20 PM Report
 

This summer while outside reading during lunch, I would screw around with this male, trying to imitate his swheet.  Sometimes he'd come closer, but most times he knew it was just some dumb ass.  However,   each room yearns light

                                                                                            but slowly accepts a gray 

                                                                                            that brings a heavy silence

                                                                                                                                  

                                                                                                                                   is visual and visceral, and very powerful 

Comment By: FreeThe Bag Lady on August 7, 2009 11:50:17 AM Report

When they describe POETRY in the Webster's Dictionary, there is your picture and the poetry that you gift us...
This is simply wonderfully crafted, the visuals are outstanding...as well as the sound of the cardinal...
(Sigh)...I am so proud for you that this is a Prize Winner,....it is so very worthy...
Respectfully, Margaret...


Comment By: FreeBarbara Demasson on May 8, 2009 02:07:01 AM Report
Bravo! I loved the use of the different time of day to indicate a particular time of life.  

"a full moon is the empty,

white light trailing at the

end of a slide show"...brilliant! You have shown the readers what excellence looks like! Congratulations, this is a splendid poem Roger. I feel fortunate to have found something of this caliber tonight. =))

 

~Barbara~ 

Comment By: FreeRin Marie on March 29, 2009 04:12:03 PM Report
Phenomenal! You definitely earned your award....how did you get the idea for this? Your brain must be a lot less linear than mine.

Amazing Write!

Rin

Comment By: FreeSharon Jorcil James on March 1, 2009 10:02:26 PM Report
I'm at a loss for words after reading this. This is truly a masterpiece and certainly deserving of the award.

Bravo! Bravo!! into favs for me!

 

Sharon Jorcil-James

Comment By: FreeJennifer on February 18, 2009 02:53:58 PM Report
Congrats! I am glad to see this win!
Comment By: FreeBarry Hodges on February 17, 2009 06:23:32 AM Report

I am totally bemused by the concept that a senior prelate of the Roman Catholic Church would be hanging about in your garden! But I liked the poem and the ending in particular: "The cardinal is gone now/and the white clover heads/wilt in the dew of my life."


If you have nothing better to do you could sample one of my "Memories" poems....

 

 

Comment By: PremiumMary Lou Allen on February 16, 2009 10:37:19 PM Report
HOORAY! BRAVO! JOLLY GOOD! By golly, I'm pleased as anything to see that award up there. If ever it was well deserved, it's here. Good for you, Roger. I've always loved this one. Reading it again brings on that same sort of weepy feeling, but how would that look? Congratulations to the award givers for an excellent decision. ML
Comment By: FreeCindy Bendel on February 16, 2009 05:44:34 PM Report
exceptional. like everything you write.

cindy

Comment By: FreeStar on February 16, 2009 01:29:33 PM Report

Roger, This is simply wonderful. Congrats on your award.


Stari*


Comment By: FreeLady Dragonwyck on February 16, 2009 10:48:28 AM Report
Roger:  Your poem is so deserving of the Feature Poem Award.  Keep up the good work.

Lady Dragonwyck 

Comment By: FreeAlison Storm Wolf on February 14, 2009 11:05:50 AM Report


I neither know nor care whether this poem was put forward for an award. You probably got fed up (as you should) at seeing others given credence.
Well I may be biased but I know wonderful poetry when I read it and I know what speaks to me on a deep level and I know also my incredible frustration at witnessing that the most wonderful poems and poets are not recognised....

This is head and shoulders over most awards and that is my plain an honest truth!

Ali x

Comment By: FreeMoon Fairy on February 12, 2009 01:16:56 AM Report
One of the best writes I have read in a very long time Roger. From beginning to end you pulled 
me into the moment and made me feel....
Outstanding, beautifully sad...a definate write that I will remember for a long time.
Thank you!
~Tracie

Comment By: ModeratorHenry M. on February 11, 2009 09:43:36 AM Report
For someone who thinks he's not a poet, you do some damned fine writing Roger! This is a great piece of poetry!  Henry
Comment By: PremiumJoe McNinney on January 30, 2009 04:11:36 AM Report
Very creative piece Roger. A joy to read, Joe
Comment By: FreeLeonard Wilson on December 18, 2008 06:21:26 PM Report
It's about TIME you posted something new, buddy...This was worth the wait.. I sure know what you mean about knowing you are closer to the end than the beginning...Each of us have to face the reality of aging...Come to think of it, we really don't. We can always go out and buy a Corvette.. :o)...Very tasty write, Roger...len
Comment By: FreeRachel on December 18, 2008 03:22:49 PM Report
WOW this just breathtaking, what an amazing poem. I don't even know what to say....

 

Comment By: PremiumRaymond Pinsonneault on December 16, 2008 04:17:01 PM Report
WOW... deep and beautiful... one of your best ... a favorite.

Comment By: Freeaaron payne on December 15, 2008 06:57:29 PM Report
I love the last line Roger.  It leaves me with a sense of aging and coolness. aaron

Comment By: PremiumMary Lou Allen on December 15, 2008 12:38:29 AM Report
This leaves me wanting to weep. You always touch the heartstrings, Roger. Good for you. I'm pleased with the length of this work, considering your usual economy of words. And I'm taking it into favs. I would say this is one of your very best, but how would that look. Well done. ML
Comment By: FreeFLETCHER on December 13, 2008 05:02:34 PM Report
Wonderful Content
Wonderful Form

I like your style I must say.

Fletch

Comment By: FreeA.P. on December 12, 2008 12:29:13 PM Report
very beautiful...i had to turn my music off to capture this fully as i read it...you effectively used one day to create moments in a whole life,
 i love how you used each stanza to sign off on some part of life, and the imagery was just beautiful...i was totally captured by the first stanza and thought it spoke volumes as a poem all its own
and i enjoyed the way this was started, as if interupting some insignificant conversation, or excusing yourself from something that holds so much less depth than your inner thoughts as you contemplate your surroundings on this day...

lovely.
Comment By: FreeGraham Jones on December 12, 2008 02:00:57 AM Report
Simply amazing Roger you have captured a mood in this, the passing of time and life itself, a true expression of the poet you have become, pure quality my friend~Graham.
Comment By: FreeCindy Bendel on December 11, 2008 09:59:02 PM Report
as Ali has said, "breathtaking" !

by far the best piece i think you have written (imho)

poignant, nostalgic, introspective

you are an amazing poet Roger....outstanding work

 

cindy

Comment By: FreeShe Whispers on December 11, 2008 09:24:14 PM Report
Roger,
 You stole my heart long ago.. your poems with so much
emotion  and I treasure your comments on my poems...
 Hugs ~ She Whispers

Comment By: FreeAlison Storm Wolf on December 11, 2008 05:33:18 PM Report


breathtaking poetry !
Sad, poignant....wonderfully written..... I enjoyed the way you wove the passing of a life with the passing sun of a day and the reference to the daisies was just superb.
I was totally caught up in the emotion and could not disengage...the last stanza is just sensational.
Into favs

You are, to my mind without doubt, one of the best poets I have read on here...but then I have said that all along.
Ali x





 


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