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Comment By:  Amy on September 7, 2008 11:57:39 AM |
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wow...standing O.
This is a brilliant piece. Went straight to faves.
So glad this got a Feature. Congrats.
~Amy
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| Comment By: Robin Constantinou on September 6, 2008 09:30:54 AM |
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wow thats quite a read, amazing that i stumbled on this randomly and i was just listening to a song called tabula rasa by sinch lol, great write
~Robin
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| Comment By: Chuck on September 6, 2008 04:40:01 AM |
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This reminded me of everything I already knew...So obviously I like it a bunch and I'm glad I came by. Congrats on the award!
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| Comment By: Ross McCague Rosco on September 4, 2008 09:01:09 PM |
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To think this is the lady who but yesterday delivered us the world of male missiles; now, I pause, I stammer, I shudder to realize that against all odds, with utmost courage and unflinching resolve, she has now truly constructed a master's piece.
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Comment By:  Moon Fairy on September 3, 2008 02:20:18 AM |
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Just as beautiful as ever Jolen...thank you for the definition. My comment would not come out the way I want so not going to try..hehe
Congratulations!
~Tracie
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| Comment By: Steve on September 1, 2008 07:11:47 PM |
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This is certainly worthy of an award and will shine in the deep blue of the night.
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| Comment By: sHeRi on September 1, 2008 01:02:12 AM |
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Congrats on your award..So glad you had a definition of "Tabula rasa", I had no idea what it was. It is amazing how you incorporated so much into one poem about the seperation of two..what a great imagination and emotional depth you correlate too.
Blessings my pen friend,
sHeRi
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| Comment By: Suzin on August 31, 2008 11:39:27 PM |
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Congratulations on the award for this amazing poem it's so deep and insightful. I'm going to have to add this one to my favorites, I love this poem!
-Suzin
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| Comment By: Joe McNinney on August 31, 2008 10:33:53 PM |
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I am very firm believer of Tsaoism and this is as close as you can get. Insightful and excellent piece Sorceress. Congrats on the award, Joe
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| Comment By: jess on August 31, 2008 10:01:34 PM |
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oops...Jolen...sorry bout that...just got done reading one of Adri's poems....
Congrats on the award Jolen!
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| Comment By: Lady Dragonwyck on August 31, 2008 07:00:03 PM |
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Jolen: super congratulations on this Feature Poem Award -- very deserved.
Lady D
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| Comment By: john carter on August 27, 2008 10:49:48 PM |
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you are amazing.
John
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| Comment By: David Turner on August 27, 2008 08:06:10 PM |
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Jolen - this is a substantial and significant piece. You express my view about the spiritual nature of the Cosmos. You capture the majesty of the evolution of the Cosmos beatifully - it is the idea of human consciousness evolving out of the primal matter of the universe that I like so much - the pain of separation from the inherent life force of the cosmos to create intelligent life tha tabula rasa of humanity.
Some images and bits of scientific backgound I was not sure about. The planets The simile of
the basketball:-
"watching stars go supernova and planets
spin along the Milky Way like a basketball
on the fingertips of a Harlem Globetrotter"
The stars revolve around he centre of he Milky Way but planets spin around their star.
Also:-
"The sky was expanding, and matter
that resembled agate marbles hurled
from a sling-shot...collided…."
Not sure about this either - it is just that agate marbles seem too substantial to represent primeval matter. Perhaps :-
"The sky was expanding, and matter
like dust in a flour mill blown
in a wild wind...collided…."
love David
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| Comment By: Angel on August 27, 2008 04:29:02 PM |
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Magnificent audio first class
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| Comment By: Angel on August 27, 2008 06:53:18 AM |
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This was beyond brilliance so unique and the words you write flow like a fountain
Love Angelxx
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| Comment By: Edward Kent on August 27, 2008 05:49:33 AM |
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wrote as only you can Jody. wonderful absolutely wonderful, I've said it before and I'll say it again...YOU ARE A STAR
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| Comment By: Robert Smith on August 27, 2008 12:30:10 AM |
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As above so below as within so without, we are so close to a step change I can almost feel it, Fantastic Tinker - Rob
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| Comment By: Alison Storm Wolf on August 26, 2008 02:34:32 PM |
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A real affirmation of truth and one that adepts may have always known but I swear that new truths are now being delivered to us day by day.
I have seen comments that say that maybe you are being 'helped' by James...but not only do I welcome synergie....but I also rejoice when I see those willing to be channels for the muse being used so wonderfully.
Two 'old souls' coming together and making new poems.....speechless
Ali x
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| Comment By: Adri on August 26, 2008 09:25:46 AM |
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See you are back in full brilliance form. This is gorgeous. You have a way with word that I would have killed to have.
Love it, special and intense and beautiful, like poetry was intended to be.
Adri x
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| Comment By: Steve on August 25, 2008 10:06:53 PM |
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A truly cosmic write strung across the page like a galaxy evoking some deep thinking.
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| Comment By: LindaM on August 25, 2008 10:06:00 PM |
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Wow! This is brilliant Jody. Your writing has moved on to an even higher
level and that is saying allot because it was wonderful when I was here before.
You have captured the imagination of everyone who has read this imaginative
and wonderfully penned poem.
Linda
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| Comment By: Roger Bacon on August 25, 2008 07:25:30 PM |
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A lot going on here. I like all the direction of up and down, left and right. It's a good craft/tool in poetry. Much enjoyed this, and of course a little refresher in my Latin.
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| Comment By: Heike on August 25, 2008 04:50:52 PM |
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Jolen, this is a brilliant piece.
I don't claim to understand any of it, but to me it seems like earth's history eddying into a microcosm of soulmates connecting in this mad world of ours. At least that might be one of 1,000 ways to look at this diamond. Thank you.
~Heike
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| Comment By: Leonard Wilson on August 25, 2008 04:11:12 PM |
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This is like the spiritual Big Bang story, Aces...I cannot tell you how very impressed with this, and you, I am. Everything beginning as one thing and then exploding into almost infinate pieces, trying to become whole again...This is top-notch writing, darlin'...This kind of stuff makes my hair stand on end....yereverlovinyinyang
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| Comment By: b doneff on August 25, 2008 12:24:25 PM |
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I suppose you could take this literally, but I took it to be about twins. (Here we go again, Miss Weirdorama strikes out on her own, lol) I read this three times, just to let it all sink in, and still had the twin feeling..anyhow, I loved the thoughts in this. It struck a note of severe independence, and yet, an umbilical cord of same linked the two verses and thoughts.
The entire write was exceptional, as I know ( and love) the woman who thought it all up. And nothing could come out of her that was anything less than that.
What a wonderful thing for me to think about today. Thank you.
bb
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| Comment By: She Whispers on August 25, 2008 10:03:35 AM |
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Jolen,
I read this twice capturing all its meaning.....Very well written with deep thought
You write with such a terrific style that is
your very own...
It is always great to read your poetic heart...
How is the weather there in England ???
It is a beautiful sunny cool day in Texas....
I was up with the singing birds this morning...
HUgs and LOve ~ She Whispers
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