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Author Name: FreeAtrophiedRibbons 9 Comments
Date Added: July 05, 2008 23:07:54 Average Score: (Needs 2)
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Type: Rhyming
Category: Broken Hearts Add To Favorites | Text Only
 
My Insides Are Sinking Like Ships
The first obligation is to the heart.
Because that's what you're supposed to do, find someone else to keep you from ripping yourself apart.
Instead, it's a slow descent of incoming calls. It's the nothing that hurts us more than anything.
Out the door, through the hallway. Onto the highway and over the ocean.

A thousand friends are dying and none of them are mine
Even more lovers lost to lust, and lust lost in time
A look of objectivity. A feeling of disdain
We're always lost, always losing. Yet always only left to gain
Author's Notes:
now i'm gonna send this to you.
and kinda hope that you write back
and kinda hope that you dont at the same time
because no matter what
i dont think ill be able to believe anything you say
now


my insides are sinking like ships

 

 

 

and i'm sorry
i'll always be sorry.
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Comments:
Comment By: FreeAngel Wings on November 23, 2009 12:33:52 PM Report

Your have such a poetic soul and heart..so, emotional..This one say it all..


x Angel x


Comment By: PremiumEric Siedzikowski on August 17, 2009 11:03:11 AM Report
good poem
Comment By: FreeAmber P on May 28, 2009 05:01:12 AM Report
This is my attempt at a decent comment:

 

Well, first of all, I think the title is pretty bad ass.  Also, I get this.  It's like we're always waiting around for someone to make us happy and it never really happens, so everyone is just sad and shit even when they do finally find the person they're 'in love' with.  At least that's what I get from it.  Wutev though.

Comment By: FreeJami Renae on April 22, 2009 08:36:20 PM Report
You express it so well.

Comment By: FreeWide Awake on September 6, 2008 05:23:32 PM Report
I guess first...we should try to find happiness within ourselves, not within someone else...believe me, this I learned the hard way!

Love the writing Johnny...hope you're feeling better soon.

Hugs,
Pamela

Comment By: FreeS on July 15, 2008 07:01:12 PM Report
you possess a very unique style i want to read more !

Comment By: FreeA.P. on July 7, 2008 09:33:31 PM Report
great flow to this piece, i really loved the line: "A thousand friends are dying and none of them are mine"...i went so well rhymthmically with the next line, and i really liked your ideas and phrasing,
well expressed lonely, longing feelings.

Comment By: FreeHenry M. on July 6, 2008 09:05:27 PM Report
You have expressed your feelings very well here. Excellent write.  Henry
Comment By: FreeCathy on July 6, 2008 07:39:13 AM Report
This is a beautiful expression of your emotions well said love the way you say you insides are like a sinking ship pretty much says all
........Cathy





 


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