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Author Name: FreeAtrophiedRibbons 5 Comments
Date Added: June 29, 2008 13:06:08 Average Score: (Needs 2)
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Type: Rhyming
Category: Friendship Add To Favorites | Text Only
 
Considerate. Consider it.
I've been constructing a lie but writing it like a story
with every sentence and simile telling you that I'm sorry
And you won't know the truth unless you seek the clues
But can I really expect that much from you?

It's for your solace, your closure, your calm.
When you're reading this like a letter but it was written to your song
Buried in best wishes at the sleight of my palm
Discovered by you. And carried in your scars all along

I'm leaving you now, trailing footsteps in the snow
Feeling less like a vulture and more like a crow
I'll miss you, I love you, I do, although-
This is my letter on letting go.

As you lie with your lover, setting sail into the deep,
and studying the science behind an angel asleep
Every once in a while bring me back within your dreams
I wrote you an ideal ending to this tragedy.

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All Your Friends Are Don.

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Comments:
Comment By: FreeJasmine on February 9, 2010 12:31:51 PM Report
Again a lovely sentiment. I feel like the first stanza actually lets the poem down a little bit, but i'm not completely sure why. (nothing to do with the lack of rhyme however!)

i think it might possibly be that the rythmic flow doesn't quite match the rest of the poem.

Comment By: PremiumEric Siedzikowski on August 17, 2009 11:07:40 AM Report
good poem
Comment By: Freejag on July 5, 2008 06:40:32 AM Report
Impressive writing interesting rhyme pattern

Comment By: FreeLink on June 30, 2008 02:43:11 PM Report
although.

this is my letter, on letting go.

 

i feel brilliant, being here.

Comment By: FreeCathy on June 29, 2008 05:05:32 PM Report
This is a perfect way of letting go loved it everyword A write with such wisdom in it
.......Cathy





 


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