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Author Name: FreeSilkintears 20 Comments
Date Added: October 11, 2007 12:10:56 Average Score: (Needs 2)
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He's gone
Today I looked deep in his eyes,
He was not there.
His body so wasted, just skin and bones
and I stood motionless,
wasted, spent, nothing left to care.

Today was when I saw that a soul can die
staring at the room of his life,
cigaret burns, filth and grime
replaced newness and beauty.
My soul cut deep by his knife

Today I asked him to leave
politely as if he was not mine.
Defiently he stood there
lashing anger, hiding his pain.
The sky turned dark, for the sun refused to shine.

Today my heart did not bleed.
My eyes felt very dry.
Exausted, tired, no energy left to feel,
no energy to cry.

Today I looked deep in his eyes
He was not there.

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Comments:
Comment By: FreeThe Bag Lady on September 1, 2009 10:46:04 AM Report
Excrutiating write, Helen....It is so hard to ask one to leave when they take part of your heart with them....Ahhhh...beauty in writing, but harshness in the lines....
Congratulations on the well-deserved write...

Margaret....

Comment By: FreeKenneth Hoffman on December 30, 2008 10:17:18 AM Report
 A raw first step to ask him to leave. Heart-pounding real.
Comment By: FreeSteve on May 22, 2008 02:25:03 PM Report
What an emotionally powerful poem.  Each stanza more compelling that the last. An excellent poem very deserving of the award.
Comment By: Freeravishing grimmness on January 11, 2008 04:13:59 PM Report
Wow that was a good read.. intensely emotional.
Comment By: FreeKaren Lowrey on December 16, 2007 01:32:25 PM Report
First of all, congratulation on capturing the well deserved Featured Poem Award.  You did a excellent job in every stanza that you wrote.  I fealt the pain, hurtache and suffering in each and every line.  To have to looked deep inside his eyes and come to realize that the one you truly love and care for is no longer in their soul and what you are now observing and seeing is admitting that you the writer has, "no energy left to feel, no engery to cry."

 

Great job in every line of imagery one can deeply understand!  You really captured, "your feelings and I can see you coming to grips with your emotions in having to admit; He's gone."

Comment By: FreeTracy Fletcher on November 28, 2007 08:18:13 PM Report
Congratulations on a very well deserved Featured Poem Award.
Tracy

Comment By: FreeAdri on November 28, 2007 03:48:36 AM Report
Congrats Helen!  I am so glad it this won!!! 
Hugs
Adri x

Comment By: Freenatasha on November 26, 2007 04:11:28 PM Report
Wow, that is a very good poem . Your poems make me cry. It is very touching.
Comment By: FreeGlata on November 26, 2007 10:52:38 AM Report
A great big congrats on winning this award! VERY deserving, HElen...Beautifully done!

Hugs to you...

Glata

Comment By: FreeLady Dragonwyck on November 26, 2007 10:15:53 AM Report
Congratulations on your Feature Poem Award. 

 

Lady D

Comment By: FreeAlison Storm Wolf on October 17, 2007 04:02:23 PM Report
It is the kindest thing to do in the long run agony as it is. Unless people are forced to plumb the depths they will never get to the point of being able to resurrect themselves.
I feel the pain intensely

Ali x

Comment By: PremiumVizualEnsemble on October 11, 2007 11:28:01 PM Report
Helen, this I know all to well. As you know I had to do this with my daughter. Talk about broken heart. My heart still breaks and the tears still fall. I know your pain dear lady. I am so sorry. But sometimes with all this pain we go through, we find peace, if you understand. You are in my prayers Helen. May God bless you. You must take care of yourself now. As Mothers we do worry and I guess we always will, but sometimes we must love enough to let go. I truly understand these feelings dear friend. This write sure hit home with me. Brought sadness within every line. Be strong now for yourself my friend. Peace to you.

~Hugs~

~Penny~

Comment By: FreeShe Whispers on October 11, 2007 10:47:15 PM Report
The poemns  that play we have to understand and play.. Great poem
~She Whidspers

Comment By: Freeb doneff on October 11, 2007 10:27:38 PM Report
Helen, I am sorry you are suffering now. I know what you mean when you say you looked into his eyes, and the man you knew and loved, was not there. Please take good care. You are going through very rough seas right now, but know we are with you in spirit.
b

Comment By: ModeratorHenry M. on October 11, 2007 06:08:54 PM Report
I feel every word you have written here Helen.... Sometimes the toughest thing to do is turn them out on their own to really make them see what they need to see! It takes so much courage for a parent to do that, it tears at the heart of you, but it is what you must do for their own good!  Henry
Comment By: Premiumlionheart on October 11, 2007 05:15:15 PM Report
This is why poetry is so healing. We do not know this person but we know you and your feelings through these words...and though

painful and sad, you left your emotions on that page and we have read it and you have turned it.

 

Richard xo

Comment By: FreeCandy on October 11, 2007 03:01:20 PM Report
Ive asked him to leave thousands of times lol he just keeps coming back hehe sorry to make light of it... it is a very heartfelt poem and I can relate on many levels!!
Comment By: FreeGlata on October 11, 2007 02:22:52 PM Report
Helen, this one tore my heart out...I know a mother's pain, and I know the agony that accompanies the "tough love" that you sometimes have to battle with.

My heart hears yours, and  I'm always here for you...

Hugs!

Glata

Comment By: Freeabby on October 11, 2007 01:20:16 PM Report
The brilliance of this poem is the manner sadness is conveyed deftly and smoothly

when I saw a soul can die.. the sun refused to shine..I looked deep into his eyes he was not there  are all lines that strike at the heart and deeply too. Welldone Helen

Abby

Comment By: FreeAdri on October 11, 2007 12:23:02 PM Report
This is so sad Helen.  It is a great piece with a lot of emotion and reality.  Great write my friend.
Adri x





 


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