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Author Name: Freemaybememories 12 Comments
Date Added: April 26, 2007 19:04:46 Average Score: (Needs 2)
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The Cherry Blossom
Once long long ago
Stood a strong cherry blossom
A thousand years past;
 
On a landscape vast
We loved and it was endless
Eons of descendents
 
Basked in its essense
We met here and fell in love
Like a gift from above
 
White skin like a dove
Almond eyes painted red lips
A kiss on your hips
 
Promised not to give
Love to another's soft lips
As long as we lived
 
I needed to leave
Breathe and face my own demons
We were in a war
 
Our land war torn
A war I didn't believe in
But sick of bleeding
 
Again seasons past
But the cherry blossom stood
Hoped you understood
 
Promised I'd be back
But unaware that my path
Would have me so trapped
 
First stationed between
Brunei and the Philippines
I saw you in dreams
 
Saw the horriffic
Years in the south pacific
The Lord my witness
 
We fought in battles
I saw soldiers lie trampled
My thoughts lay scrambled
 
I held on to you
Dirt on my face blood soaked through
My life fought for you
 
Five years dragged on by
I'll never forget those times
Hope was on my mind
 
I came back alone
You weren't waiting for me
I went to our tree
 
I saw you sitting
My heart and soul so willing
A tear no forgiving
 
You were there with him
Saw you laugh like it was me
Turning suddenly
 
You saw me and fell
Like a ghost is how I felt
Five years slowly melt
 
And my sole reason
For breathing, for believing
Withered like seasons
 
No sea this stormy
No flowers to adorn me
No time to worry
 
And still it stands; For
trees know nothing of glory
End of the story
 
 
 
 
Author's Notes:
This poem is an extended haiku full of rhymes and conflict. (man vs himself, man vs man, man vs love) (man vs nature, time vs nature, and importantly love vs. nature)    I wanted to contrast the lives of 2 beautiful things, Man and Nature  (cherry blossom) with respect to time. Men live once so we invest so much into something meant to last, the Cherry blossom knows its flowers are not meant to last so it sheds them every year to regrow new ones, in the end man is heartbroken and betrayed by everything he knows, nature however already know the fickleness of time so its adapted to constantly losing and regaining so there is no death for nature.  The poem ends with nature prevailing over man with the exception of the nature not having the level of consciousness to understand glory ( by glory i mean every human emotion that we have the capacity to feel) but maybe its better to not have these feelings and last longer... I will leave that up to you to decide. 
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Comments:
Comment By: FreeLinda Jo on November 26, 2009 11:15:24 PM Report
I missed this first time around but feel compelled to say how powerful your writing is...five years to fit into the simple haiku form...you have packed much emotion into this poem. I also enjoy the contrasts. I was privileged to see cherry blossom season in Japan in the early '90s...they are really inspiring!  you did a fantastic job on this piece...have you ever considered entering it for the featured poem award?
Comment By: FreeMoon Fairy on April 18, 2009 06:06:34 PM Report
Excellent write and the extended haiku
is alot of work, impressive!
~Tracie

Comment By: FreeJose Noriega on December 1, 2008 08:04:52 AM Report
this is awesome and inspiring like the one before me has said

it pretty sad ending

but still pretty nice

-jose

Comment By: FreeTana McCarthy on September 1, 2008 10:15:28 PM Report
Inspiring, dude, I can feel a haiku coming on...Tmac
Comment By: FreeCandice on May 16, 2007 05:20:54 PM Report





Amazing wonderful haiku poems...cherry blossom sound of spring.


Comment By: FreeHannah Mae on April 30, 2007 08:37:39 PM Report
Well, you did it quite well :) (I figured a new note deserved a reading...) I love this poem!!
Comment By: FreeHannah Mae on April 30, 2007 03:45:27 PM Report
That is amazing, beautiful, and....I am wordless.

Absolutely incredible!!!

Excellent and masterfully done

~Shanna

Comment By: FreeLeonard Wilson on April 28, 2007 04:30:29 PM Report
This is the most impressive haiku I've ever read, buddy..VERY nice job..This took a little work...len
Comment By: FreeGlata on April 27, 2007 01:01:53 PM Report
Shaoib, this is amazing! You really did a wonderful job on this...love born, the death of love, then love reborn with another. How many times has this scenario been played out over the past five years...I wonder.

Loved this!

Glata

Comment By: FreeShe Whispers on April 27, 2007 11:25:07 AM Report
Shoaib,
I'm just blown a way with such a very moving and powerful love you had for  you lovely lady.. It is what got you through war times..Yher love for you ..
The Cherry blossems so sweet in the spring... How you so loved her..
This brings tears to my eyes.. simply beautiful and sad.. I love your poems...

 Your friend ~ She Whispers

Comment By: FreeQuiltingLady on April 26, 2007 09:29:15 PM Report
If that cherry blossom could speak, oh the tales it could tell...the image of the steadfast tree compared to the fickleness of human nature. 

Patty

Comment By: FreeLast Temple Knight on April 26, 2007 08:07:37 PM Report
The tree saw the birth of romance and the end of it as well...

The content fit the form very nicely, well written indeed!





 


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