Today Is: Thursday, June 27, 2019 12:29 AM. Our Topic of the Week: Quagmire
Questions?

Check our Help area first!

Comments? Suggestions?

Contact us now!

We like hearing feedback from members on how to improve the site!
 
 
 


 
Author Name: FreeFireHam 9 Comments
Date Added: April 02, 2007 17:04:35 Average Score: (Needs 2)
Views This Week
Members: 0
Unique Members: 0
Guests: 159
Total Views
Members: 40
Unique Members: 20
Guests: 965

Type: Unspecified
Category: Love Add To Favorites | Text Only
 
Drowning

Drowning

 

Oh to dwell within this moment of total surrender.

The waters are tumultuous, yet so warm and tender.

The waters of our love are dark and so very deep.

There is no crawling out for the banks are so steep.

 

Each time I envision you, I am caught in the undertow.

Escape, fruitless; I must simply ride the ebb and flow.

I surface for air, only to be pulled under again.

Unable to escape, so inside the whirlpool, I remain.

 

Waves crash over and the sea billows roll.

Wrenching my body, the waves take their toll.

 The undertow is strong.  Im unable to catch my breath.

Yet I want to drink in more and my lungs fill with death.

 

My body now begins to loose control.

I am prepared to relinquish my soul.

 So here am I, drowning in the wonderful sea of love.

A better way to go down has never been dreamed of.

 

04/02/2007

Author's Notes:
This was a work in progress for some time...  I've learned, if you become stymied, put it to the side for a while and eventually the lightbulb will turn on...  :)
Report Offensive Poem.

'Drowning' Copyright © Harold Ham McLelland
Copyright is property of the above author or group. Reproduction in whole or in part is strictly prohibited.
Click here if you feel this poem is in violation of a copyright.
 
Click here to send this poem to someone!

Comments:
Comment By: FreeAngel on June 3, 2007 03:46:02 PM Report
Magnificent each word beautiful

 

Love Angelxx

Comment By: FreeRin Marie on April 26, 2007 05:17:37 PM Report
This is outstanding! I love it.  It flows so beautifully- I look forward to reading more.

 

Love, Rin

Comment By: FreeJanet Gentry on April 18, 2007 03:18:57 PM Report
Isn't if funny how some poems come complete in our minds, and then others come to us in bits and pieces?  This was well worth the time it took to write it.  And well worth my time to read it again.

Janet

Comment By: FreeAdri on April 3, 2007 01:21:06 PM Report
This is your best work Hammy...  So sensual and soft and tender, but also real and passionate. 
Wonderful, wonderful!!!!  BRAVO!!!!!! 
Adri x

 

Comment By: FreeLady Dragonwyck on April 3, 2007 11:27:53 AM Report
...such a sensual write --- waves upon waves, crashing and ooooohhhhh !!!

 

Lady D

Comment By: FreeGlata on April 3, 2007 07:08:27 AM Report
Mighty  powerful  undercurrents there, Hammy...you have to either outsmart it or go with it...Love's an amazing thing.

Great job!

Hugs...Glata

Comment By: FreeBarbara Demasson on April 3, 2007 02:45:03 AM Report
What a way to go eh! For sure... this is a fine way to give up the fight! *lol* Lovely!

 

~Barbara~  

Comment By: FreeShe Whispers on April 2, 2007 11:42:51 PM Report
Ham,
(((

My body now begins to loose control.


I am prepared to relinquish my soul.


 So here am I, drowning in the wonderful sea of love.


A better way to go down has never been dreamed of.


 


04/02/2007


As I read this... in between the lines say so much more....The sea is a temptress she is always whispering...Lovely poem that tugs at my heart so much... I think you had som one in mind as you wrote this...  Hugs ~ She Whispers




Comment By: PremiumVizualEnsemble on April 2, 2007 07:12:19 PM Report
WOW!! Now this is powerful.....drowning in the sea of

love....now, that can't be so bad can it, I ask :)...Love

makes us do some pretty weird stuff sometimes huh? :)

This is such a strong message....I truly enjoyed this!

Thanks for sharing dear.

~Penny~





 


Check for Announcements.
on our Home page!

User poems are sometimes graced by images and textures stored on our site
courtesy of GRSites.com, Sandy Hradil, and Sherri Emily.


Welcome, Guest!

Become part of our
friendly community
of on-line writers!

Join today!
 
Username:
 
Password:
 
Forget Username or Password?

Members On Line: 0
Guests On Line: 77
Members in Chat: 0


Happy Birthday


 
We Thank You!

For your donations
and subscriptions!

Creative-Poems.com
P.O. Box 7931
The Woodlands, TX 77387

 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
monovalent-defence
Copyright © 2003-2017 Creative-Poems.com.  All Rights Reserved. Use of this site is subject to certain
Terms of Service rules which constitute a legal agreement between you and Creative-Poems.com.
By providing links to other sites, Creative-Poems.com neither approves of, endorses, or gurantees
any information, opinions, or products found on those sites. Users follow links at their own risk.