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Author Name: FreeBlueyd553 16 Comments
Date Added: January 17, 2007 10:01:24 Average Score: (Needs 2)
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My Surrender
~My Surrender~
 
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What is it that makes me seek you out?
Looking for you to appear somewhere in my day
Why do I long for your warmth and presence?
When you are so far away
And when you surprise me out of the blue
Why does my heart ripple like a pebble across a placid pond?
You opened a gate I thought was forever closed
Making me believe in the power of love
And when you unlocked the poetry of my soul
 
Dismantling these walls of stone
Stripping me of every defense
My utter vulnerbility revealed
 
Surrendering
 
I fell so helplessly
Exquisitley
In love with you
 
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Comments:
Comment By: FreePelagic Mind on September 3, 2010 05:47:05 AM Report

Writing humour is difficult, taking on a Love Poem in the face of all those great poems that have gone before and finding a new edge to the subject is extremely difficult. I can only write on the subject through metaphor not in the first person. So this is a good poem, in my humble opinion because of its narrative style. The sound and metre make it sincere and the reader is in no doubt you have written it from experience. Where you use metaphor itís very clear what you mean. I like it.. Its a good poem.


Comment By: FreeAndrew on January 15, 2010 10:08:13 AM Report
Why does my heart ripple like a pebble across a placid pond?...only a master can craft such lines.  this is a beautiful work of art crafted by one whose talents are unequalled.  your imagery sweeps away your reader, pushing him to yearn to be the object of such affection...
Comment By: Freejess on August 7, 2008 08:35:27 PM Report
Cindy,

This is such a beautiful write....

Hope you have a great day...well evening....

love ya

Comment By: FreeSteve on July 10, 2008 12:14:39 PM Report
A very strong write with some serious self reflection and great imagery. 
Comment By: FreeAndy on June 13, 2008 12:46:13 PM Report
Wow Cindy dont tell everyone about us!  lol   Im totally teasing i couldnt get that lucky!  lol
Comment By: FreeLink on June 8, 2008 06:23:43 PM Report
I love it. Surrender is my favorite word (besides nincompoopus ;p).

 

So much justice to the word =)

 

Keep writing.

 

Comment By: FreeLeonard Wilson on May 2, 2008 06:55:44 AM Report
Yer box was full, which could be a good thing, depending on the type of box...Here's my response to your comment..I think Richard's comment where he said he was about to hurl very satifying...If something like this doesn't offend SOMEBODY, then I didn't go over the top enough...len

Comment By: FreeRoger Bacon on February 22, 2008 07:48:28 PM Report
Went hunting for new stuff by you and found this older one.  Not disappointed at all. 
Comment By: FreeLeonard Wilson on March 20, 2007 01:50:45 AM Report
GREAT!!..This really hits the nail on the head. Nothing but new love can give a human this feeling...len
Comment By: FreeS on March 6, 2007 02:41:52 PM Report
great poem
Comment By: FreeAlison Storm Wolf on February 6, 2007 05:23:31 PM Report
As Isaid already....one of the best poets on CP

 

Ali x

Comment By: FreeShe Whispers on February 6, 2007 01:01:12 AM Report
Cindy
Ahhhh>>. How did I miss this heart felt poem... ?. I must say who ever holds your heart is a lucky man... This tugs at ones heart.. such a romantic lady.. Hugs ~ She Whispers

Comment By: PremiumJoe McNinney on January 20, 2007 02:58:30 PM Report
Give in to me now, you can't resist,
you became mine the moment we kissed.
Getting through your gate was easy to do,
finding your heart was the key to get through.
So many years you built up that wall,
with just one kiss that wall did fall.
My victory was in your surrender,
come with me now, I'll love you tender.

I love this Cindy, terrific write hun, Joe

Comment By: FreeGraham Jones on January 17, 2007 08:41:10 PM Report
Cindy you could make a cold winters day seem like august, this just emanates a lovers warmth, beautifully written.
Comment By: ModeratorHenry M. on January 17, 2007 11:41:33 AM Report
A pure statement of love Cindy, whomever has captured your heart is indeed a lucky man.     Henry
Comment By: FreeMujtaba H Zaidi on January 17, 2007 11:04:44 AM Report
Hello!...I see the purity and depth of your unabated love for your soul-mate...well-done dear poetess!




 


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