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Author Name: FreeSensual Sorceress 45 Comments
Date Added: February 09, 2007 21:02:38 Average Score: (Needs 2)
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Today, I Had A Moment

Today, I had a moment.
One minute you didn't occupy.
I was free, I was fine. I could breathe.
Today, I had a moment.
It wasn't hopeful,

Or sorrowful or joyous.
There were no tears, or laughter.
Nothing hurt or felt good.
My heart was steady,

Neither racing, nor aching.
In it, I didn't love you.
I never knew your name.
I couldn't hear your voice,
Or feel your touch.
Today, I had a moment.
One increment of time,
Fleeting though it was.
As it whisked by, I realized,
In the other 1, 339 minutes
I would feel remorse.

Because… Today,
I had a moment.

Author's Notes:

Inspired by Adri's poem 'Goodbye'
You can read it here

http://www.creative-poems.com/poem.php?id=189522

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Comments:
Comment By: FreePaul Peter McLean on March 31, 2008 01:17:21 PM Report
Excellent work, one of your best, I think. The emotion and message is sustained uniformly from beginnng to end, and the last line is quite a climax. Congratulations on the award.
Comment By: FreeGoliath Assassin on February 3, 2007 03:47:35 AM Report
This pissed me off.  That's a purely emotional response, but I'm going with it.  How can one moment even try-or rather, CLAIM to try to balance against the countless moments shared in the past?  This just irks me to no end.  Decisions that will fill so many future moments with remorse should not be met with such uncaring simplicity.  I don't feel the remorse is real without having labored painfully over a decision as such.  Evidently, this too, was very powerful.
Comment By: FreeSamuel E. Stone on December 26, 2006 03:34:25 PM Report
I enjoyed reading this poem....well crafted and entertaining while holding some profound thoughts...

Sam

Comment By: FreeChuck on December 23, 2006 02:27:44 AM Report
wow... this is exactly what it is all about... I really do think you know what you are doing... and it's fantastic for sure... congratulations for writing this one...wow.
Comment By: FreeCynthia Jones on December 15, 2006 11:04:05 AM Report
Congrats on your muchly deserved award. *S* Whispering Winds
Comment By: FreeHelen on December 14, 2006 06:45:36 PM Report
Wow. This is a legendary poem!

It's scary to think of having such a moment. A moment of not knowing your loved one's name...

Comment By: FreeJessica on December 11, 2006 07:28:50 PM Report
Beautifully done! Something I can truly relate to at this point in time. Congrats on the award.

Jessica

Comment By: PremiumRobertM on December 11, 2006 04:16:23 PM Report
Nice job Jolen. Sad, but poignant and meaningful to those who choose to admit it so.  RM.
Comment By: FreeSilkinTears on December 11, 2006 12:17:15 PM Report
Sometimes we need only one moment...to breath...I sure can relate to this...loved it. Congrats.

Helen

Comment By: FreeAdri on December 11, 2006 01:14:36 AM Report
Congrats my J...  Beautiful piece!!!! 
Juicy Girl x

Comment By: FreeAngelique on December 10, 2006 08:40:54 PM Report

I loved the simple repetition of theme and the steadiness of pace in this write. It wasn't triumphant or hopeful (as it was only one moment)  but it was a realization, or rather a recognition of it. I really enjoyed the whole concept and delivery of this write. Congrats on the award.


Comment By: FreeKaren Marrah on December 10, 2006 07:10:38 PM Report
Wonderful write here Jolen and so deserving of a featured award. Congrats!!

 

~Karen~

Comment By: FreeLady Dragonwyck on December 10, 2006 06:32:47 PM Report
Congratulations on your Feature Poem Award -- you just keep winning with these GREAT writes.

 

Lady D

Comment By: FreeRoger Bacon on December 7, 2006 08:20:16 PM Report

Sometimes I wonder if the heart ever really heals.  It gets fooled when the next comes along...


I like the repitetion of 'today I had a moment' 


Comment By: FreeBarbara Demasson on December 3, 2006 12:29:06 AM Report
Well it's a start eh...one moment is better than none although it may make the rest of the time seem worse. *sigh*
How do you post this in December and still have the comments from May 2006? I am not blonde...but maybe I'm having a "moment" too! DUH?
Nicely said...now if only the next moment would hurry up! =))


~Barbara~

 


Comment By: FreeJoe Petro on December 2, 2006 01:01:26 PM Report
This is so truthful. Healing the heart begins with these kinds of moments. Love the little things you select and expand upon. jp
Comment By: ModeratorHenry M. on December 2, 2006 09:51:45 AM Report
In this one moment you have the chance to decompress, get the everyday stresses of life and love out of your mind so you can recharge the batteries to take it on all over again! Still as great as the first time I read it Jody.   Henry
Comment By: FreeJames Thomas Whitworth on December 2, 2006 05:44:24 AM Report
Reading through this piece and noting its theme, one would expect that the writer could get carried away with the feeling, given its rarity and would possibly get taken up in the moment, as it were. You, however, my dear, kept in control of both the feeling and its effects. That the moment is so rare renders it one to dwell on rather than wax over - the dwelling suggests the longing that one would feel to recover it, rather than an excitement of having it, brought on by the fact that it is but a single moment to make the most of. It is a melancholic situation rather than a eulogistic one and your language, tone, control and, more-so, your ending all exemplify this.

Blessings,

Sir J.

Comment By: Freetom on December 2, 2006 05:16:33 AM Report
amazing poem Jody every once in a while we need those moments I know sometimes I had more of them but I enjoy the one moment I get. excellent penning

hugs kisses

tom

Comment By: FreeAngel on December 2, 2006 05:01:38 AM Report
These moments ...Brilliant Jody

 

Love Angelxxx

Comment By: PremiumJoe McNinney on December 2, 2006 04:57:22 AM Report
I need a moment like this,
just one minute without her on my mind,
I need my thoughts to just wander,
but thoughts of her are all I can find.

Can you point me in the right direction,
I really need these thoughts to cease,
Give me something else to think about,
I  really need to find my release.

Sorry Jody, you did it to me again. I love this, Joe

Comment By: FreePia Andersson on July 25, 2006 07:23:48 AM Report
I think that you express in a wonderful way what its loke to belong and what that is doing with you . A beautiful poem from you - I love it! Pia

Comment By: FreeThe Mystic Poet on July 17, 2006 09:00:00 PM Report
Wow.......I cant think of what to say its just........wow.
Comment By: FreeAlison Storm Wolf on May 31, 2006 02:57:54 PM Report
oh those moments...................
Ali x loving this
Comment By: PremiumMary Lou Allen on May 31, 2006 04:12:08 AM Report
Well done, Jody. This is some of your best work. A well defined moment of relief before now rushes back in. Very good work. ML
Comment By: PremiumKeith Overstreet on May 29, 2006 10:47:04 PM Report
Awesome!!!!!!!!!!!!!
I wish I had moments to write like this!
Keith
Comment By: FreeSharon Jorcil James on May 29, 2006 09:09:12 PM Report
Dammit woman!! You ARE good at this.
Very, very deep thoughts expressed here my friend. Love it.

Sharon JJ
Comment By: FreeRoss McCague Rosco on May 23, 2006 08:39:20 PM Report
Splendid. Like piloting an island in the Pacific. I love the simplicity and the hammering home of the simple line, I had a moment. The affirmative statements, followed by the negative ones, followed by the affirmative to reassert the tiny isolated period against the larger despair. Nice control and craftsmanship to render the effect.
Comment By: FreeSavanahB on May 23, 2006 06:43:36 PM Report
Today I had a moment too. My meds wore off and reality set it! I quickly put an end to that foolishness...

Lovely write, Evil, and healing starts with 'a moment', it's a shame that the other 1,339 still suck! The Cajuns call it 'Da Gin' it's sorta like the Japanese thingy but tastes better... The Mad commenter
Comment By: PremiumJoe McNinney on May 23, 2006 12:21:51 PM Report
I love this, I have these moments every so often, I just forget about life and everything in it. The Japanese call it Zazen, I call it peace and quiet! LOL! Joe
Comment By: FreeStar on May 23, 2006 10:55:28 AM Report
Jody, this is a very touching write. Sometimes we only given a short time to share love. My Love used to always sing these lyrics from Queen:
'Just one year of love
Is better than a lifetime alone'. We had five years together and then he was taken from me.
This write reminded me of all of my memory filled moments too.

Star

Comment By: FreeGlata on May 23, 2006 08:44:25 AM Report
Beautifully heart wrenching, Jody...and something that many of us can relate to on a personal level. I could sense the heartache lurking underneath, and I could also feel the pain that is always present in such a situation. You've shown your softer side with this, Jody, and it's beautiful...Makes me want to send a boat load of hugs to ya!
Love you, gal...
Glata
Comment By: Freeb doneff on May 23, 2006 03:38:59 AM Report
This was devastating, brilliant, and had an echo to it. I agree that this is one of your best Baby, and your BB could read it a million times...wow, I stand amazed. Barbie
Comment By: FreeFLETCHER on May 23, 2006 12:12:28 AM Report
Seconds into minutes and minutes
Into hours and hours into days
And days into months and months into years
And years into decades tens into thousands
Thousands into millions, millions into billions
Billions into zillions and forever and forever
One moment can last forever! Great Write!
Fletch
Comment By: FreeLeonard Wilson on May 22, 2006 08:50:35 PM Report
I like Linny's comment, Aces..You sure can peg a feeling, darlin'. The sadness and resignation in this poem comes over with sledge hammer power.I know I've said this before, but I remember when you first came to this site. I still can't believe how nmuch you have learned in such a short time. I'm thinkin' you were a great writer in another life and are just taking a refresher course..Yereverwonderinhowyaditfurball
Comment By: FreeLinear Z on May 22, 2006 03:21:16 PM Report
Beautiful sorceress.
"I realized,
In the other 1, 339 minutes
I would feel remorse."
Fantastic stuff. as a wise man once said "You almost miss the pain, because at least then you had something to cling to" or something like that.
Comment By: Freetom on May 22, 2006 01:22:17 PM Report
beautiful Poem Jody sometimes these moments are something to cherish forever
hugs kisses
tom
Comment By: FreeRobert Smith on May 22, 2006 11:17:02 AM Report
Jody the last three lines brought this one home with a slap, clever,clever poem - great work - Rob
Comment By: ModeratorHenry M. on May 22, 2006 10:07:45 AM Report
Loved this Jody! It reminds me of the moments I have, only mine are of the senior variety! Lol, and they come at a more quickening pace with each passing day! Henry
Comment By: FreeLady Dragonwyck on May 22, 2006 10:06:19 AM Report
Ms S.S.: very true to the way it is!!! Enjoyed this one a lot...


Lady D
Comment By: FreeAbbas on May 22, 2006 09:02:51 AM Report
And yet while doing this you remembered.

That`s the mystry.

Abbas.
Comment By: FreeWide Awake on May 22, 2006 08:59:22 AM Report
ah yes...I have felt this moment before, I can relate. You make an excellent point of how it accents how we are NOT like that the rest of the time.

Beautifully expressed my friend.

Hugs,
Pamela
Comment By: FreeShe Whispers on May 22, 2006 08:27:51 AM Report
Some times we just have to be free of them so we can breath without them in our mind every minute.. this poem I can so relate to!! great job jody.. later ~She
Comment By: FreePelagic Mind on May 22, 2006 07:12:01 AM Report
Time seems to be linked by moments to me, just a pearl necklace of moments strung together by time...Strange time when you can step back in images in dreams one minute and then back in the "real" world the next. I liked this piece, it has a sort of dreamy quality about it.
Comment By: FreeAdri on May 22, 2006 07:08:19 AM Report
O my soul, this is amazing! You are speaking to my soul I wish I could have a moment to be free from al feelings, just a moment. Beautiful.
Adri





 


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