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Author Name: Adminrich53 3 Comments
Date Added: August 24, 2005 20:08:34 Average Score: (Needs 2)
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Further Apart
Since last I beheld your glowing, heavenly face,
Earth has moved far around it's track.
Remembering, I stare past the sun even now,
To where my heart and mind last met in one place.
 
Under life's tall bridge, like a saw unknown to retreat,
Swiftly the sundriven river of conciousness flows.
Incessantly eroding the exposed fault lying beneath,
Carving separate continents below our unsteady feet.
 
As mighty wheels in the heaven majestically spin,
So does time and distance between us extend.
Hope long eclipsed, but never feeling far from you,
Your star somehow shines just beneath my skin.
 
Receding from that instant of our eye's final touch,
Sky cycles in opposition draw us further apart.
Never waning, ever brighter your image appears to me,
And deep inside I know I love you so, so much.
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Comment By: FreeBarbara Demasson on January 26, 2021 02:01:42 PM Report

The erosion of an exposed fault certainly undermines a relationship. Distance is often a fault that presents insurmountable obstacles. Unsteady feet in love become increasingly unsteady with distance working against the union. "Hope long eclipsed"...how beautifully heartbreaking. Yet the heart continues to love, despite realizing the futility of it all. "Sky cycles in opposition"...a fitting phrase to convey the message. The theme of workings of the heavens throughout the poem works favorably here in revealing the circumstances and depth of your affection. Very nice!

 

~Barbara D. *reveling in the depth and truth of the line, "To where my heart and mind last met in one place".* Sigh    

Comment By: FreeSouthernStar on August 24, 2005 11:21:28 PM Report
This is really really beautiful.
Keep up the great work.

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Comment By: Freeb doneff on August 24, 2005 09:58:15 PM Report
Rich, this was exquisite, in form, in everything. To me, it felt like you were so far away from her, but so close in soul that you were always with her, so there was an achiness to it also. Verrrrrrrrrry pretty, and soulful. Barbie




 


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