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Author Name: Adminrich53 40 Comments
Date Added: March 28, 2005 20:03:46 Average Score: (Needs 1)
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Adrift, Lost
In the quiet of night,
The stillness of dark water
The world seems full of shadows
No joy reflected.
 
Days gone by
I learn nothing - afraid to call out your name
Drifting further from a land no longer I can see
And the stars clouding over.
 
How can this be happening?
Why do I feel so helpless to make a course?
What can I do or say to change
The direction of the tide?
 
Your memories blow warm through my sails
Images keeping my body from sinking
I long for your smile and the touch of your hand
I beg to return me to your shores!
 
With just the smallest sound
Or the smallest ripple of shadows
In the fabric of this night
I would know where you stood and how to reach you.
 
Yet, unworthy do I feel to plead for direction
Knowing you understand your heart.
You probably know my location
And know that we must part.
 
But this flare I do send to you
So that you know for sure
It's me who is adrift and uncertain here, disconnected.
Without the beacon of your smile
Or hope your shore will be seen again.
 
Missing you I will be to the end
When no sweet gull comes to rescue me
From this place so alone.
With shadows closing in
Pulling me around and down
A direction known and certain.
 
Then I will know it had to be
A decision you said to make.
Had to be what was right for you
To send me to this fate.
 
That dark water washing over me
Dissolves my selfishness
Softens my unhappiness
Knowing all was done that could and
Praying you found your way.
Author's Notes:

It is about loss of connection to your soulmate. You just want to drown, really.

It came together in the middle of a sleepless night. I slept afterward. I came back to it weeks later. It was still powerful and, unfortunately, horribly accurate.

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Comments:
Comment By: FreeValerie Dohren on August 3, 2014 06:40:20 AM Report

Beautiful poem, many lovely and inspired lines.  Enjoyed reading.

 Val 

Comment By: FreeShajeea on May 28, 2012 12:08:57 PM Report

You have chosen your ID Name very precisely. I agree with Adelle. This is very rich in words, meaning and your feelings. No wonder! You were bound to win that award. You deserved it especially for this poem. Great piece of art....................Shajeea


Comment By: FreeAdelle on November 23, 2009 10:41:51 PM Report
this is completely rich and bountiful in emotion. good work. excellent and very precise in imagery
Comment By: FreeBruce A. Peaslee on July 23, 2009 09:54:15 PM Report
Rich -   The emotion in this work is obvious and is well expressed.

 

 

 

---Poetrydad---

Comment By: FreeKenneth Hoffman on January 4, 2009 05:25:24 PM Report
I see a wounded heart but a kind one.
Comment By: PremiumRaymond Pinsonneault on October 8, 2008 09:05:57 PM Report
What a beautiful write Richard, so much feeling...keep em coming.


Comment By: Freeobohwemu o. kennedy on September 3, 2008 10:41:04 AM Report
I feel you, man. A lovely piece!Thumps up!
Comment By: FreeSandra M.Hill Veinot on September 25, 2007 05:36:58 PM Report
Takes me to a place I don't want to go. And you wrote of it so well. Hope you recovered well.
Comment By: Freesherry wilbur on May 14, 2007 09:01:38 AM Report
THE LOVE AND CONNECTION OF A SOULMATE NEVER REALLY DIES JUST GETS BURIED DEEP INSIDE . AND THOUGH LIFE FORCES US TO MOVE ON  IT ALSO HELPS US TO SEEK OUT A NEW . THIS IS A VERY TOUCHING AND BEAUTIFUL WRITE , ITS STRAIGHT FROM THE HEART WERE ALL BEAUTY LIES AND WAITS. IT IS ART IN THE PUREST FORM BRAVO. HUGS SHERRY
Comment By: FreeGoliath Assassin on February 4, 2007 01:33:18 AM Report
Wow!  I figured you were always too busy to come up with stuff THIS good!  What was I thinking?  Clearly, I was out of my mind!  You are very capable of greatness in poetry.  I'm adding this one to my favorites as well.
Comment By: FreeChristin Mowery on October 11, 2006 02:12:12 PM Report
Great job!
Christin

Comment By: FreeThanhly Nguyen on September 16, 2006 03:20:59 PM Report
I think it's great......have a good day sir
Comment By: Freeshannon lee on September 11, 2006 01:33:50 AM Report

This Sir,


This is a Great write.


 


I came to this site to see others of Heart.


I have to say you take the part.


You feel as all who has seen and is.


 


May I give you my thanks.


Comment By: FreeGlata on September 8, 2006 01:23:02 PM Report
This could have come directly from the depths of my own aching heart...and it is far too accurate...FAR too accurate.

Feeling this same loss, Rich...and sorry, so very VERY sorry, you had to endure this, as well.

Blessings and hugs...

Glata

Comment By: FreeMark S. Valence on January 26, 2006 12:33:14 AM Report
Yeah, I hate it when things like that happen, it does made you feel like you're drowning and you put it so beautifully in words. Good write Mr. Richard M!
Comment By: FreeKitten Of Chaos on October 22, 2005 09:41:37 PM Report
Very well written. you are a wonderful poet. Keep it up i look forward to reading more of your work.

~Haylee~
Comment By: FreeJo on October 19, 2005 10:09:11 PM Report
This extend metaphor is lovely... very descriptive and beautifully sad. Very powerul... I like what Bridges said... your desperation changed into hope... somethimes that's such a terribly hard change. I'm glad you made it. Wonderful write. -Jo
Comment By: Free.. ..Pocket Monster.. .. on October 12, 2005 12:21:12 PM Report
Great write Richard...
Amazing story.
Your desperation turned into hope..
And your hope led to great things....
Comment By: FreeAlison Storm Wolf on October 10, 2005 09:16:50 AM Report
I don't know how I missed this one but I am glad I found it now. I too, lost what I thought was my soul mate and the pain nearly drove me mad. Nothing I had ever experienced came anywhere near to it.
But you know, everything that happens to us has a lesson and a reason. Often people have made a soul contract with you before you both came into this world to live this life. They will have shown you something very precious and beautiful and as time goes on and the pain gets less accute you can see what that lesson was. With me it was realising just how much love I am capable of holding. I had never realised what it was to love so unselfishly before.
Then, when our lessons have been learned...comes the real soul mate.
Ali x
Comment By: FreeMary on October 7, 2005 03:38:56 PM Report
this is a very powerful piece indee i have yet to meet ive conversated with dennis infact mostly everyone has ive came back and was so sad that this site was leaving but u saved it and u saved it with ur wonderful poetry thanks soo much for bestowing us with this site and your poetry ive beren here for a year and some change but i plan on staying here for quite awhile....nice deep write
maryann
Comment By: FreeNick on October 4, 2005 08:12:58 PM Report
Wow, a very powerful poem indeed. The symbolism is fantastic. Wish I would have known about you sooner. You're pretty good.

Hope you keep writing, even if being the owner takes up your time.
~ Nick ~
Comment By: FreeCindy Bendel on September 27, 2005 02:27:34 AM Report
Rich ...this leaves me shaking...i know so well what you are saying...i understand the loss of a soul mate...it is so tragic and leaves you feeling inconsolable. I love this poem...it is simply flawless and endearing, despite its vivid sadness. ~ Cindy
Comment By: FreeJ on July 31, 2005 03:47:27 PM Report
Very chilling and beautiful. My favorite of yours so far. I am adding it to my favorites list as well. Great job.
Comment By: FreeGay Johnson on July 19, 2005 11:20:24 PM Report
A very touching write. I'm sad but at the same time I'm going to try and make sure this doesn't happen to me.
Gentle Dove
Comment By: FreeCathy on June 27, 2005 10:05:13 AM Report
You have touched my heart here with your sadness and lonliness. you have written this with so much emotion that it captures the readers heart. As it did with mine I also can relate to this feeling so deeply.
Excellent Job!!!!!!!!!
Cathy
Comment By: on June 7, 2005 12:57:07 PM Report
Life goes up and life goes down-
It's gonna be that way till your in the ground
Don't let that paint your world black
Come back ready to fight and attack
For as long as you really try
Then listen up cause I won't lie
There comes a reward for those who survive
And make it past this illusion of being alive-
Good Luck On Your Roads Ahead-
Peace~
Comment By: FreeRacquel on May 30, 2005 12:48:41 PM Report
*sigh*.. yep, all i could do is sigh... really great.. =D
Comment By: FreeSteve on May 9, 2005 12:34:54 PM Report
Now i see why this one has the award my friend. It kept my attention the whole way through and it made me think. Fine piece of work and congrats are in order
Comment By: FreeBOB on April 30, 2005 09:15:49 PM Report
A wonderful and powerful write. I like the way you used the sea to equate to life, well done and congrats on your award, Bob :)
Comment By: FreeWith pain comes strength on April 28, 2005 12:41:50 PM Report
Congratulations on the award.
this is quite a powerful write,
Nik
Comment By: Freecrying wolfe on April 26, 2005 03:27:56 PM Report
I never did congratulate you on your ribbon...your first poem so very deserving...you have a way with words that captures the reader's attention...congrats my friend...

Wolfe...
Comment By: Freejoia on April 26, 2005 12:30:52 PM Report
Your unusual metaphors make this the more powerful and creates a feeling of loss so deep and sad and understandable..the loss of such magnitude is never over..merely finds a quiet corner. Awesome write, and congratulations, well deserved. joia
Comment By: PremiumLindaM on April 25, 2005 02:51:08 PM Report
Beautiful work Richard.
Congratulations on the award.
Linda
Comment By: Freesiouxsie sioux on April 25, 2005 01:14:09 PM Report
wow.... good write. I love the way your use of words really gets the loss across. Keep on writing.

Oh and thanks for the comment on mine.
Comment By: FreeJeff on April 25, 2005 08:03:07 AM Report
Powerful write,
Congratulations on the award.

Jeff
Comment By: FreeSamantha Firefly on April 25, 2005 05:31:10 AM Report
So sad, but beautifully written. Congratulations on your award.
Samantha.
Comment By: FreeSharon Jorcil James on April 24, 2005 11:38:36 PM Report
Congrats on a well-deserved award Richard.

Sharon JJ
Comment By: FreeBarbara Demasson on April 24, 2005 11:00:25 PM Report
I would like to express congratulations on behalf of the administration and CP team.

Beautifully done Richard!

~Barbara~
Comment By: FreeShe Whispers on April 21, 2005 03:02:37 PM Report
RICHARD,
WHAT A POWERFUL POEM.. TO LOSE THAT SOUL MATE THATS THE LIFE OF YOUR BEING IS A LIVING HELL
I KNOW OF THIS DARKNESS..
VERY WELL WRITTEN..
~ INDIA~ SHE
Comment By: Freecrying wolfe on April 18, 2005 05:47:48 PM Report
Yet unworthy do I feel to plead for direction
Knowing you understand your heart
You probably know my location
And know that we must part.<<<< I have just gone through this....sometimes life isn't fair, but as you said and I strongly agree, if it is meant to be, it will be...when a person loses a soulmate, its like experiencing a death....an unexplainable feeling of sadness...adding this to favs...

Wolfe...





 


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