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Author Name: FreeSensual Sorceress 98 Comments
Date Added: February 09, 2007 07:02:03 Average Score: (Needs 2)
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My Portrait



My Portrait


Artist paint a portrait of me
Capture me with your oils
Stun with brilliant perception
True colors of soul's toil

Show how lovely I once was
I'll bring whatever you need
Can you see the joys I had
The ones now taking seed

Brush away deepest flaws
Take me on a trip in time
A place I'll never be old
And love is forever mine

I know this is much to ask
An awful lot to require
Of one who paints portraits
And available for hire

Well imagine my elation
As he said he'd try his best
Couldn't wait to see his view
I donned my nicest dress

Arriving for my first sitting
I told him he'd earn his wage
He said my portrait was done
And he gave me a blank page
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Comment By: PremiumDan J. Mazurek on March 3, 2016 06:42:31 AM Report

I should like this comment page blank for how do I say anything to capture here such a perfect poem.


thankyou


dan


Comment By: PremiumEric Siedzikowski on October 24, 2009 08:30:42 PM Report
Wow! I am floored! It is so original,like nothing I have ever read before.You are absolutely incredible!

Sincerely,Eric

Comment By: FreeAmy on May 16, 2009 12:25:40 AM Report
hmmm..I agree with the many posters before me. This is one of those that really makes you think. Like most I saw it as a fresh start with a clean slate. You really are an outstanding writer (don't mean to gush but it's true).

~Amy

*saving to faves (along with every other member here...lol)

Comment By: Freeb doneff on November 25, 2008 09:49:19 AM Report
Ahhhh Love...you ...sigh. I got so much from this! Yes, we are all blank pages when born, and we fill them up with all sorts of things, good and bad throughout life. This represented starting over, it meant clearing away all the muck we get bogged down in; it meant that we have been given something precious, life, and we have the world to fill it with. This being about you, meant to me, that there is simply too much woman to put on one page alone. I could use boring adjectives to describe you, but I feel the same way the artist did in this..no words, no drawing, could be lovely enough to represent you, so you are better left to stand on your own. Beautiful..
Congrats and so much Love,
bb
Comment By: FreePelagic Mind on November 16, 2008 07:43:10 AM Report

Warm ochresí terracotta, jet and ruby reds,


Autumn leaves around your feet


Satin silks adorn your head


And the artist works his magic,


In oils he builds like stone


In mirrored fragments of your self,


Just you and he alone


 


So what does a portrait say to us?


See them hanging on our walls,


Their souls are bared for all to see


In painted perfect tapestry.


 


I liked your poem very much..


Comment By: FreeJennifer on October 19, 2008 08:53:44 AM Report
the 100th comment! YEAH! this is really good, but then again YOU Knew THaT! lol

always enjoyed your work~

jen

Comment By: FreeMoonStar on October 5, 2008 06:20:40 PM Report
I shall reply!!!!!!

 

 

Now this is a MASTERPIECE!!!!!!!!!!

 

That's what I'm talking about////

True, honest to goodness, talent!!

I think I found a home away from home....

 

 

Luv Ya,

~MoonStar~ 

Comment By: FreesHeRi on August 25, 2008 11:42:34 PM Report
Beautifully written..paint a flawless picture, blank page..

no one is flawless or perfect, that is the message I got from this.

 

Love it, so real

 

Blessings,
Sheri

Comment By: FreeShe Whispers on December 17, 2007 11:31:49 PM Report
Jolen, Now tell me ..how did I miss this?? I try to read most of your poetry... Very talented write... A blank page...so where is the color... I am an artist??
 Your something Lady...
 ~ "Merry Christmas "  To you and James...
 Hugs ~ She Whispers

Comment By: FreePaul Peter McLean on November 13, 2007 06:52:20 PM Report
Good work Jody. I see from the previous comments that the poem has sparked much thought in those who read it. You give us just enough material to get us thinking, and then leave it up to us. And that's good. Congrats on the award.
Comment By: Freeabby on October 30, 2007 11:04:55 AM Report
A blank page portrait? Well this affirms the mystery and inexplicable artistry

 of self  which surpasses the outside regardless of their brilliance. The blank page challenges the self  to paint self  best beyond imagination. Great work J.

Abby

 

 


Comment By: FreeRobin Constantinou on August 17, 2007 08:47:31 AM Report
woah, totally blown away, such a hidden meaning in this, capturing the image of your former self, greatly powerfully done, i love the ending, brilliant work
~Robin

Comment By: FreeGoliath Assassin on October 9, 2006 03:37:33 PM Report
Was this a clever crack at yourself?  As in "Hello?  Anybody home?" Self-depreciation is always good for a laugh... but I'm not sure if that is what you were going for...
Comment By: FreeJames Thomas Whitworth on October 1, 2006 05:58:55 AM Report
What word do I use to describe this? One would never do it justice, though the most out-standing virtue of this write is your perception.

"Show how lovely I once was", "Brush away deepest flaws", "Can you see the joys I had" - All of these point to something that can never actually be captured, unfortunately. This, even before your wonderful ending, shows your grasp of the nature of human 'being'; that is, we never really are anything, but in a constant state of change.

Your finale not only shows the reader the difficulty of pinning down and reclaiming what once was, but also the very transitory state in which we live. Even if it were possible, nothing would do it so well as a blank canvas - nothing signifies our ever-changing world quite so readily as a portrayal of the very beginning of everything: which is nothing.

 

Rejuvenation and regeneration and renewal and all those kinds of re- words are a constant theme in your work. This speaks of a major journey/search;  though in these older poems it is of a journey still in progress as opposed to the newer ones which speak more of an attainment. I am glad you found what you were looking for. I don't think you will ever have to do without anymore. Good. You deserve it, princess.

Comment By: FreeWilliam on September 11, 2006 11:00:15 AM Report
Wonderfully written! To have oneself so judged and found wanting and even asking for it!

 

Bil

Comment By: FreeThe Mystic Poet on June 26, 2006 04:33:28 AM Report
We are all a blank canvas, because no one else can paint us but ourselves (or atleast we shouldnt let them). Wonderful write. Puurrrfect!
Comment By: FreeLinear Z on May 31, 2006 04:31:20 PM Report
Wonderful stuff baby girl. I love what you do with words sorceress, nothing can ever capture our spirit completely, and unless you are happy to focus on a few aspects and hopes then a blank page is perfection.
Comment By: FreeJessica on May 31, 2006 11:09:21 AM Report
Well Done and congrats on the well deserved award!

Jessica

Comment By: FreeAbbas on May 20, 2006 08:34:28 AM Report
"No U Turn"

Searching for a secret potion,
I made my bet on world
Give me my time once more and I
Will Mortgage my soul for Him
Who make me once more young.

Time and Space stops not though
We have to make out fullest
What we are passing through
Or else then be on rest of road
Searching for a secret potion.

Inspirined me..

...much.

Abbas.
Comment By: FreeRobert Smith on May 15, 2006 11:16:38 AM Report
Have you scratched the thin veneer of human conditioning here? reading the poem and looking at the comments I think so. J one for the memory banks - fantastic - Rob
Comment By: FreeVanessa Cush on April 16, 2006 02:07:02 AM Report
i am at a loss of words. your poem is incredible, and most deserving of its award. ~nami
Comment By: Freeaaron payne on March 27, 2006 03:23:30 PM Report
+1, stark. -ap
Comment By: FreeDamon D. Brewer on January 20, 2006 11:28:12 AM Report
Congratulations on your award Jody, and may I add the poem definitely deserved one or maybe two of them. You did a tremendous job writing this one. I loved it from the beginning, but I especially loved the ending.
Damon
Comment By: FreeJoe Petro on January 15, 2006 11:09:15 AM Report
Hello my Lady. Just perusing your work and found a treasure. Now I can take that blank canvas and paint my own perceptions. jp
Comment By: FreeMeg on January 4, 2006 05:38:30 PM Report
This is a beautiful write, and how intriguing to find oneself a blank sheet, daily fresh that one may paint one's own portrait. I enjoyed reading this, well-written. Thank you for sharing.
XOXO Cheerios XOXO
Meg
Comment By: FreeMichael on December 29, 2005 03:22:28 AM Report
And then?... He tied her up, and then? HE put her on the railroad tracks, And then? the whistle blew.... And then? And then along came Jones... So the song goes, but that's the song. My question is: And then? Michael
Comment By: FreeMegan on December 27, 2005 10:05:45 PM Report
Looking at the previous comments, you've heard it all before...but this is a beautiful piece. Definitely worth a favorite as well as the award.
Comment By: FreeStar on December 22, 2005 09:23:18 AM Report
This is just lovely. But really, which is more important; that which we were or what we've become? Great write.

stAri*
Comment By: FreeAmanda R. on December 17, 2005 03:45:32 PM Report
OH My GOSH thats all i can say i am defanitly adding this to my favs
Comment By: FreeDavid on December 15, 2005 10:19:48 PM Report
awesome...at first when i started reading this i thought umm,this is boring so wheres it going? 3rd and 4th section i said oOo. i now know why it won an award. great job on it,full of words many do not use in their poems. love the way you explained everything

David
Comment By: FreeAmelie on October 27, 2005 09:23:52 PM Report
oh ouch hehe ;) nah, impossible the page would be blank... i dont believe it one minute... theres too much color and personality in this expression for that to ever be true :) excellent poem, i sincerely enjoyed very much... thanks for sharing :f

later... xx

Comment By: FreeCindy Bendel on October 20, 2005 05:05:02 PM Report
Wow Jody, I don't know how this passed me by but I am sure glad I came upon it. You are amazing...that sounds so trite...you deserve so much more than my words can convey. This is one outstanding piece of work. Loved it.
~Cindy
Comment By: on October 10, 2005 10:56:10 AM Report
You are not a mere poet you are a devriocromancer. Youare touched by theophogloboism. You words are like mistrehandrids hung on golden hypoltrexplessionatromysystemicalas.
Comment By: FreeDairine Bennett on October 9, 2005 04:47:59 PM Report
this poem is wonderful! i enjoyed it very much....congrats on the award....good job! xxxxx!
Comment By: FreeAngelic Light on October 6, 2005 04:58:52 PM Report
wow what an awesome poem! i loved it i like thinking poems! good job!

~Angelic Light~
Comment By: FreeBruce A. Peaslee on October 5, 2005 06:25:31 AM Report
Jody- What a fascinating poem. From my perspective this poem is correct, every day,moment and hour is a time to transform from the old to the new. The question is, How much was the artist paid? It's the Scottish in me!!!

---Poetrydad---
Comment By: FreeJ on July 29, 2005 10:28:53 AM Report
This is without a doubt my favorite of yours so far. If I figure out how to do the favorite poems thing this is being added to it.
Comment By: Freejoey on July 15, 2005 06:25:20 PM Report
very deep
great job you are going to fav. list
your style of writing is great
Comment By: Freenanette on July 11, 2005 05:47:04 PM Report
Jody,
OMG I truly love this, I know I have said it before, but I love the ending on this write... What a brilliant perception, my friend.....
Great job
Thank you
~Nanette
Comment By: AdminRichardM on June 26, 2005 03:42:18 PM Report
I can remember reading this one when I first arrived on the site. As I read it now, it still has the same impact and timeless feeling. One where he captured someone who could be whoever she wanted to be!
Rich
Comment By: FreeCathy on June 23, 2005 08:19:33 PM Report
Loved the ending wish most of the time my portrait is an blank page I am not photogenic. Your words so well written again capture your reader and keep them into your poem.
Suberb job!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Cathy
Comment By: FreeRoger Bacon on June 14, 2005 08:32:58 PM Report
It's so refreshing when the poet leaves us with ourselves at the end. Awesome.
Comment By: PremiumJasmine Christian on June 2, 2005 02:41:49 PM Report
This was perfectly executed. Such a wonderful, wonderful piece of art.
"Arriving for my first sitting
I told him he'd earn his wage
He said my portrait was done
And he gave me a blank page"

This is a twist..made me think! EXCELLENT as always. You are such a talent!

Comment By: FreeWaseem Akhtar on May 23, 2005 08:29:08 AM Report
Respected Girl of such a unique poem, really Just out>>>>>>standing!!!!!

A well wisher of ur BRIGHT future !
AloneStill !
Comment By: PremiumSandy J Hradil on May 23, 2005 12:42:08 AM Report
This is so beautiful and deserved this award!
The ending sent a chill down my spine!
Comment By: FreeCandy on April 4, 2005 11:43:26 AM Report
wow a wonderful write sweets!luv the ending!

Candy:)
Comment By: FreeIngwa on March 25, 2005 01:51:14 PM Report
Very beautiful, descriptive, and to the point. A very nice read, thank you. Ing.
Comment By: FreeAlison Storm Wolf on March 6, 2005 04:33:48 AM Report
well, what a well deserved award it is too! love the new look as well. Many congratulations sis. well done!
Alison SW xxx
Comment By: FreeWilliamGoldenpen on March 5, 2005 11:27:41 AM Report
73 comments have said it all sweetie. Enough to say that you are truly, a Poetess. Congrat on a well deserved award.

William.
Comment By: FreeThe Bag Lady on March 4, 2005 10:24:37 PM Report
This is an EXCELLENT poem, Sensual Sorceress, and the Award proves it with great recognition~!! Your talent shows through brightly on this great work~! CONGRATULATIONS, and may you receive many more!
The old bag lady......
Comment By: FreeMarian Mason on March 2, 2005 10:04:05 PM Report
If we take away life from our face then we truly have a "blank page". Loved this very well done on your award
Marian
Comment By: FreeSharon Jorcil James on March 2, 2005 06:02:52 PM Report
Knew this was a winner from the start. Congrats my dear friend.

Sharon JJ
Comment By: FreeGay Johnson on March 2, 2005 02:46:19 PM Report
Superbly written my love. I thought I would leave my first comment page blank.
kitten
Comment By: Freejoia on March 2, 2005 12:23:46 PM Report
Excellent, Lady of the wind, this is excellent. My favorite, and aptly pinned with a medal. You kicked in this one, sister Jody.
Congratulations, joia
Comment By: FreeCynthia Jones on March 1, 2005 05:12:24 PM Report
Oh Wow! S-H-I-N-Y- LOL Congrats on your award Jody my dear. *S* Wind Whisperer
Comment By: FreeWith pain comes strength on March 1, 2005 05:31:39 AM Report
This is excellent!!!!
What more can i say, wow!!! Very ingenious and thought provoking...
Well done on the award, this def deserves it!!!
;oD
Nik...still thinking bout this blank page
Comment By: Freecrying wolfe on March 1, 2005 12:43:27 AM Report
Well, first of all, the artist painting you was right...no extra work needed, that last stanza was so beautiful...put a lump in my throat... second of all, excellent work...and congrats on the ribbon....

Wolfe...
Comment By: PremiumAnn on February 28, 2005 11:42:41 PM Report
Congratulations on the award Jody. Excellent work, love the ending. Ann
Comment By: PremiumLindaM on February 28, 2005 09:53:15 PM Report
You go girl!! If ever a poem deserved the
award this beautiful piece does.
Congratulations !!! Linda
Comment By: FreeSavanahB on February 28, 2005 08:45:16 PM Report
Woo Hoo, Sista kicked butt and took names! I awarded this one the Golden Teddie my own self, happy to see the judges agreed! Jude......doing a little bump and grind in honor of the occasion!
Comment By: FreeHeike on February 28, 2005 01:25:46 PM Report
So many different ways to interpret this poem (I'm with the Dorian Gray approach, not surprisingly) - still one verdict that comprises all of them: it is brilliant!
Congrats on your award, Jody!
~Heike
Comment By: FreeJeff on February 28, 2005 07:58:27 AM Report
I loved this one the first time I read it, and I'm glad to see it win an award.
Congratulations!

Jeff
Comment By: on February 28, 2005 07:14:28 AM Report
Dear Ms.S, I loved this when I read it. I am very glad you got this award. Congratulations!
Maria.
Comment By: FreePaul Walsh on February 28, 2005 07:00:47 AM Report
Knew this was an odds on favourite when I read it first!!! Wonder why!!
Walshy
Comment By: ModeratorHenry M. on February 28, 2005 06:20:25 AM Report
Although I have commented on this once before I have to say it was well worth reading this again, Congratulations on winning the award Jody. Henry
Comment By: FreeLeonard Wilson on February 28, 2005 03:38:34 AM Report
I knew this was a winner when I read it...Great job, Aces..You desrved this, kid....Furball
Comment By: FreeBarbara Demasson on February 28, 2005 02:06:35 AM Report
On behalf of the Administration and staff of CP I congratulate you on winning this award. Splendid work!!! *applauds*

~Barbara~

Comment By: FreeCarlos on February 28, 2005 01:06:27 AM Report
great poem, a well deserved award
Comment By: FreeFLETCHER on February 27, 2005 11:28:51 PM Report
THIS IS SPLENDED. YOU HAVE CAPTURED A PORTRAIT IN MY HEART AND MIND. WELL WRITTEN
CONGRATULATIONS
YOURS......FLETCH
Comment By: PremiumJoe McNinney on February 27, 2005 09:58:06 PM Report
like i said ealier down in the comment section,perfection,congrats on the award jody you always deserve it, joe
Comment By: FreeCraig David Dawson on February 26, 2005 10:32:13 AM Report
I cant paint..but i can draw a portrait with words....not as good as you tho.
Comment By: on February 25, 2005 03:49:43 PM Report
Great poem, Ms.S... I love the ending.
Maria.
Comment By: FreeTodd on February 24, 2005 08:33:48 PM Report
The blank page is an interesting twist. I've re-read this a few times and I admit it makes me pause for thought. Perhaps the page is white because to live is to flaw after all how much color can be in perfection. I think you must be perfect just the way you are.
Comment By: FreeScarlet Begonia on February 18, 2005 07:04:59 PM Report
Very deep and interesting.....thought provoking.......deep thinking....
Begonia
Comment By: FreeGay Johnson on February 14, 2005 04:26:59 PM Report
WOW!!!!! I'm in awe. I love that the page is blank. You are only as old as you feel so they say. Captivating.
Kitten
Comment By: FreeSavanahB on February 12, 2005 06:43:48 PM Report
Now that's a mind smack, momma! This is sterling, Jody! I will have to ponder the meaning of this one and draw my own conclusions. Great post! Great thought provoker! - Savanah...getting my crayons and paper.
Comment By: FreeSharon Jorcil James on February 12, 2005 09:46:24 AM Report
Well-written, beautifully-crafted. The ending leaves the reader in suspense.....evoking many thoughts. This poem stands out Jody....very well done my friend.

Sharon JJ
Comment By: FreeKaren Redd on February 4, 2005 09:04:24 AM Report
In our own eyes only we know what we'd want to see. Very ingenious write as yours always are- very very good. Karen
Comment By: Freetom on February 4, 2005 12:30:20 AM Report
Wow this poem has beauty and passion that comes from your soul.a beautiful write Jody Excellent.very descriptive portrait of the mind and soul.
hugs kisses
tom
Comment By: FreeCynthia Jones on February 3, 2005 07:24:15 PM Report
Jody, you sure caught me off guard with this one my friend. Excellent write. *S* Wind Whisperer
Comment By: FreeJeff on February 2, 2005 08:56:21 AM Report
This is excellent!
I loved each word, and anticipated each new line.

Jeff > wishing you a good day!
Comment By: ModeratorHenry M. on February 2, 2005 07:28:54 AM Report
Beautifully written Jody, each artist gives his own rendition . A classic on beauty being in the eye of the beholder. Henry
Comment By: FreeBarbara Demasson on February 2, 2005 01:24:34 AM Report
The mystery of the 'blank page' is a marvelous way to end this poem.

If beauty is in the eye of the beholder...there would be many different images imagined upon that blank page. Perhaps it is best left blank...one artist could not possibly capture them all upon one canvess.

Delightful read! =))

~Barbara~
Comment By: FreeLeonard Wilson on February 2, 2005 12:55:24 AM Report
CORPSE, that is......:O(
Comment By: FreeLeonard Wilson on February 2, 2005 12:52:28 AM Report
GREAT twist, at the end, Aces..Caught me, totally, off guard..The beauty of your soul could never be captured in oil..A famous painter, I forgot who, said that a painting is the corpe left behind of the creative act..Now the music of your soul could be put to music.Music is the only art form that lives....Pretty deep thoughts, here, kid...Yer ever impressed Furball
Comment By: PremiumIbeBecky on February 1, 2005 02:12:36 PM Report
Kudos to you on this one, Jody! What a brilliant masterpiece! What an ending!

However; we all know that this could NEVER be your portrait. Girl, there wouldn't be a blank spot on the canvas of an artist who is capturing your likeness, your spirit or your soul! You must have been writing about somebody else, Dear :o)

~ Becky ~
Comment By: FreeCorina on February 1, 2005 01:14:21 PM Report
Ironic and sad. And above all, beautiful.
Comment By: on February 1, 2005 12:10:44 PM Report
This poem is amazing, Jody... Very good piece... Have you read "The Portrait of Dorian Gray" by Oscar Wilde?
Jane xxx
Comment By: PremiumLindaM on February 1, 2005 11:27:03 AM Report
As you know Jody, you among my top three
favorite poets on this, site and anywhere
else as far as that goes. This one is another
glorious write. Hugs, Linda
Comment By: Freecrying wolfe on February 1, 2005 09:56:33 AM Report
Well hell woman, this is I think one of your best poems....I hope others get the strong message in this....adding it to favs....

Wolfe...
Comment By: FreeAlison Storm Wolf on February 1, 2005 09:30:54 AM Report
That is because the greatest achievements in your life are yet to be....
why paint a picture of yesterday
Lovely poem
Alison SW xxx
Comment By: FreeGlata on February 1, 2005 09:29:04 AM Report
This is fantastic! I knew when I read it that the ending would have a twist...and you twisted it perfectly!
Great GREAT write...
Glata
Handing you the brush to create your own portrait...
Comment By: FreeLady Dragonwyck on February 1, 2005 09:17:44 AM Report
Wow! I know the feeling all to well....great write!!!


Lady Dragonwyck
Comment By: FreeCeeCee on February 1, 2005 08:50:10 AM Report
Great ending....nicely written.
Comment By: FreeDani on February 1, 2005 08:31:33 AM Report
Hey This is really good...Great imagination u have there Bravo:)
Comment By: PremiumJoe McNinney on February 1, 2005 08:31:06 AM Report
in you my dear lady,i see perfection,no artist can do you justice,beautiful poem sorceress,joe
Comment By: FreePaul Walsh on February 1, 2005 08:29:03 AM Report
Brilliant a message for us all!!! Love this I must say!!
Walshy
Comment By: FreeDarkness Rides This Night on February 1, 2005 08:25:15 AM Report
This is a masterpiece friend..! I get the chills everytime I read it..! I can't think of any words that would compair to it's beauty..! So I will stop typing and read it again..!




 


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