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Author Name: FreeBarbara D. 26 Comments
Date Added: March 07, 2004 21:03:56 Average Score: (Needs 2)
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The Underworld
Shifting shadows haunt the darkness
They writhe and twist without relief
In the underworld of torment
The dead lament their seasoned grief

Mournful wails attach to chilled winds
Despair drifts through dead of night
Mumbled moaning, anguished groaning
Souls in shrouds of misty white

Hopeless cries and bitter weeping
For the loss of murdered dreams
Endless self-reproach and regret
This tedium of tears and screams

Ashen lips speak words that vanish
Fleeting, vaporous breath of death
Altered truth is soon devoured
It is too late to confess

Hades claims the unbelievers
Confined to hell, eternally
The due punishment for sinners
Where evil wanders aimlessly
Author's Notes:
~To put a new slant on the description of hell, I've written about it as a cold place~
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Comments:
Comment By: FreeAndrew on March 1, 2010 03:30:36 PM Report
i've always thought that hell made more sense as a frigid place, where your only warmth comes from yourself- wonderful job conveying the hopelessness - wish i'd read this earlier - it's clearly an award-winner.
Comment By: FreeSteve on April 16, 2008 02:53:57 PM Report

Your poems are always so interesting and rather unique.  The imagery is really thought provoking.  Congratulations on the award.


Comment By: FreeFilthy on October 4, 2007 11:43:33 AM Report
Well writen, and as those below me have said well deserving of the award.

Comment By: FreePaul Peter McLean on January 17, 2007 07:09:40 PM Report
Great work Barbara. Since we don't know what hell is really like (because nobody's come back to tell us) I suppose one theory is as good as another. All we need to know is that it is not a nice place to be. And the scenes you give us are of such a place. Well done. Well worthy of the award.
Comment By: Freeoppodeldoc on January 9, 2006 03:41:25 AM Report
Well deserving of the award, I enjoyed reading It! Great Job!
Comment By: FreeKarl Berry on May 28, 2005 12:55:45 PM Report
This is really bin a vision of it's own ....very nice ...you are really in touch with the shrouds of misty white................................Patch
Comment By: FreeLeonard Wilson on March 28, 2004 02:36:40 AM Report
Hell of a write,Barbara.How did I skip over this one? It deserves a ribbon or two.Just fine writing,all the way through...len
Comment By: FreeRobert Frondle on March 22, 2004 08:14:53 AM Report
i feel i heard this song on a jukebox on a boat ride on the river Styx
bravo
Comment By: Freefaedreams on March 20, 2004 07:22:41 PM Report
This is an amazing work, i love it. Congrats :).
~faedreams~
Comment By: FreeJoseph Smith on March 20, 2004 03:25:50 PM Report
Thats a long comment list below, no wonder. Its because this poem is so good. Keep up the good work, I think I'll add this to my favorites :)
Comment By: Freejoia on March 19, 2004 12:55:34 PM Report
Congratulations - If Hell is our worst nightmare, you have captured mine. Fantastic imagery.
joia
Comment By: FreeMary F. Charest on March 18, 2004 04:59:08 PM Report
Very different and imaginative. Well deserved award.
Mary
Comment By: Freemelanie del valle on March 16, 2004 09:47:36 PM Report
excellent poem
meritous of the ribbon that's for sure! Fantastic job and incredible flow !!!
Comment By: FreeThe Bag Lady on March 16, 2004 01:44:52 PM Report
OOOOOoooooo...CONGRATZ, my friend~!!
All who read this, KNEW it was a Blue Ribbon Poem~!!
....the old bag lady....knowin' good readin' when she sees it~!!
Comment By: FreeVictoria on March 15, 2004 07:10:52 PM Report
Chilling! Excellent write!
Comment By: FreeTimespell on March 15, 2004 03:58:49 PM Report
Barbara~
How the HELL...Did I miss this poem!!
Your description seems,quiet warming in a strange sort of way!!
Snow angels in hell...LOL
Not that I want to visit it soon,Maybe when it freezes over!!
Congratulations on your award.
:o)
~Timespell~


Comment By: FreePaul Walsh on March 10, 2004 06:06:39 PM Report
"Abandon all hope yea who enter here," Dante describes various regions of hell as fierce cold. Named after the Viking goddess of the underworld, Hella and much like the Greek Tartarus. Great Barbara.
Walshy
Comment By: FreeDarkness Rides This Night on March 10, 2004 09:50:56 AM Report
It is the check that keeps us on the right path in this life. An inbreed fear of a place of torment if we cross that moral line of humanity..! A great discription of it..!
Comment By: FreeThe Bag Lady on March 9, 2004 02:08:20 AM Report
Brrrr-rrr--rrr....You have put us into a chilling landscape, Barb~!
Your magnificent imagination has taken us upon a dark and almost 'enchanting' place....Images abounding~!
Margaret....that old bag lady, walkin' carefully within the Underworld....
Comment By: FreeJason Brown on March 9, 2004 12:53:30 AM Report
Twisted Words,
Forming an excelant Write
Wonderful Job
Jason Brown
Comment By: FreeBruce A. Peaslee on March 8, 2004 04:42:35 PM Report
Barbara- This comes chillingly close to an essay I wrote
several years ago. I never ceases to amaze me that, no matter what you you do, some has thoughts very similar
to your own. You have captured very eloquently, what I
perceive Hell to be in part. It is interesting what was
actually being pictured to the original Biblical hearers, when a description of Hell was given. What is myterious to us was clear to them. Great Poem! ----Poetrydad----

Comment By: PremiumWilliamGoldenpen on March 8, 2004 04:56:01 AM Report
This is a very vivid imagining that held this reader from start to finnish. I enjoyed this Barbara.

William.
Comment By: FreeJake R. Parsons on March 8, 2004 12:45:52 AM Report
Interesting idea! You just might have something here! I know that MY hell would definitely be colder than it was hot ;) Love it Barb!
Comment By: PremiumAnn on March 7, 2004 11:00:00 PM Report
Awesome imagining here. Sounds like a horrible existence. Great write Barbara.
Comment By: PremiumKeith Overstreet on March 7, 2004 09:53:09 PM Report
A very desciptive write, Barb. A fine view in the window with words. Awesome job, Barb!
Comment By: ModeratorLady Dragonwyck on March 7, 2004 09:36:38 PM Report
Well, Barbara, this is a very original description of Hell!! I thought the picture of the damned FREEZING was very good!!!


Lady Dragonwyck




 


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