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Author Name: Freeborderline_mary 1 Comments
Date Added: February 27, 2010 13:02:18 Average Score: (Needs 2)
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Type: Rhyming
Category: Broken Hearts Add To Favorites | Text Only
 
Your Immortality
Why does this pain still make me long for you,
Mistaking lies for truth, and old for new
So everything reflects in green and blue―
In eyes I claimed as mine, and thought I knew?

Would it be wrong to fall into your arms,
Ignoring all my wisdom's shrill alarms,
Allowing my surrenders, your disarms,
In trust that dying heals more than it harms?

How dare I let your memory hold sway,
Forgetting all of me you took away,
Believing there's still something I can say―
That pining for your scent does not betray?

Why does my heart believe you're still alive,
As if the parts of you love might revive
Won't thrive in failure's wake, then fail to thrive,
Or flee from me as fast as you can drive?

When did I first decide to change my name?
How could I ever think to shift the blame
If I am what I am, and not the same,
Because I now regret what I became?

How dare I still recall your smoothest skin,
Or dream a while that you would let me in
As if your lies were pale and never sin,
And I failed more by holding things within?

Do you remember anything of me,
Or are you happy now that you are free?
How can my heart forget your eulogy
When questions grant you immortality?
Author's Notes:
Forever trying to figure out what went wrong.
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Comments:
Comment By: PremiumDavid Turner on January 13, 2011 03:42:14 PM Report
Jessica, I cannot understand why no one has commented on this before.  Since you have put it into 'Broken Hearts' I would have thought it would attract quite a number of comments. It is a complex poem though, but beautifully written. The iambic pentameter quatrains with a single rhyme are very effective but a rigid constraint. It is the contrast between the strict form and the uncontollable emotions being expressed that makes this such a powerful piece.



David





 


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